| "I Hate Him" Reviews/Comments [ 76 ] |
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Reviewed By: miaka On: May 29, 2003 07:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hmmm...this is definitely one of the best youji x aya fic ever...im actually looking for sumthing to read when i stumbled to this great piece or work!!!...damn, wish i have a talent like yours!!!!.......oh well...hehe...
eniwei...update soon okei!!!....and i hope that shit face sebastian will suffer soon bcos i really hate his guts.......evil grins |
Reviewed By: mimi On: May 28, 2003 15:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love your fic please hurry up and write more it's soo nice and sad and just kawaii!!! please update faster! |
Reviewed By: touga On: May 27, 2003 07:32 CDT
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-.-;; mediaminer must hate me. I really can't seem to find the newest chapter 19. ;_; And I really want to read it. ~.~ Sometimes I think im the only person who has this problem: I know there's a new chap, I just can't seem to see it on the main story page, thus I have no access. |
Reviewed By: chaosfirestar@yahoo.com.sg On: May 04, 2003 06:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hmm. would like to just say that I have read your fic on ffnet, and absolutely loved it. came across it again here and decided to review. Yeah. I think that it's a really good story. I like the way you portray the characters; they come alive.
btw, i couldn't help but notice some grammar issues, nothing that hindered the reader's understanding, but still occasionally irritating. if you need a beta do tell me, k?
hmm. yeah, just'd like to say that i actually downloaded your fic onto my com. have read it 3 or 4 times now:)
But i don't really get why sebastian seems to have these funny issues. is he after ran or aya? imho, i think he should turn up to be a bad guy and then they can chop him up into little bits *bloodthirsty grin* but that's my irritation at him speaking. ignore me:D
yup. think that's about it. great story!
Loved the way it developed. not to mention the length of it:) |
Reviewed By: Miko No Hoshi [MediaMiner Member] On: April 28, 2003 05:25 CDT
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Excellent job here, truly wonderful. Your character development is great and your plot is even better.r Yohji's role is perfect and I enjoyed very much how you let him be kind and patient. And a little crossdressing never hurt anybody. One thing though, there were just a few speeling/grammar things, and what I wanted to ask was if you have a beta reader? If not, I offer you my humble services because I think your a kick-ass writer and I hate to see anything like simple mistakes detract from the wonderful job you've done with this story. Anyhow, if you're interested, drop me an e-mail: TwoNakedBishounen@lycos.com |
Reviewed By: Yue On: April 24, 2003 00:14 CDT
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Yohji slipped out his gloves two times. once in the garage, then in the house. 'rest is perfectly fine ^^ |
Reviewed By: Escaphile On: April 21, 2003 18:55 CDT
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WEE!!I've missed your writing!! * glomps her* Your definatley in a tie with Nekojita-sama for fav!! ( especially since youupsate quicker than she does..-.-,,) * huggle* If you don't stop getting hurt and sick I'm gonna go overthere and put you in a padded bubble.*nod* yup, definatly gonna do that. |
Reviewed By: babaca [MediaMiner Member] On: April 19, 2003 02:44 CDT
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Well the first half it pretty distracting with the smart quotes on that didn't format properly... however, the rest of it was easier on the eye to read... not to the story....
Who knew Omi was a lying machine? That was just funny to me as it was to Ken.
YES! Aya (Ran) is finally actively letting Yoji know that he cares for him and wants to be around him. And actively seducing him for a change.
I know I say this almost every part for a while but PLEASE get Aya-chan and Sebastian on a damn plane soon? She's an idiot for thinking Sebastian is trying to break up Aya & Yoji for "her" sake, even if she did have a little snap to realize the flaws in Sebastian's plan.
OUCH! I'm sorry you hurt yourself. I hope you get better soon! |
Reviewed By: Jess On: April 18, 2003 15:34 CDT
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As always I love this fic! *glomp*
I want to kill sebastian though! Evil bastard! |
Reviewed By: Phoenix On: April 10, 2003 15:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a Fantastic story!! Never have I seen so many twists and turns in a single fic!!
Please Continue!! |
Reviewed By: jamc79 On: April 10, 2003 08:16 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've read this fan fic a couple times and I can't wait for more to be written. I feel as though I'm reading a book instead of a fan fic on-line. The writting is superior and cleverly written. The cliff hanger in chapter 17 is killing me. Write more soon, please! |
Reviewed By: Nickythetokoyboy On: June 16, 2003 14:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*glomp* I'M SO HAPPY THAT YOU FINISHED THIS!!!!!!!! And now that its over I'm gonna torute you till you write more!!! * pulls out her secret weapon* Yeah!! Thats right! I'm gonna sick my flying monkeys on you!!! * cackle* |
Reviewed By: Ice-is Blue [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2003 14:38 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
17's visible now. Found it over at FFN before this, but I'll review here. Hmmm... I'll have to take your word that there were plot holes. It seemed fine to me. Well, now that everything's back on track, I'm looking forward to more. One thing I'm wondering, though. Perhaps the guys are more honorable than myself, but does it really matter if that ass wins? If he comes near Aya, beat him to a pulp. Or keep Aya near his sister. Meh. I'm not sure what to think of the policemen yet. |
Reviewed By: babaca [MediaMiner Member] On: March 22, 2003 15:40 CST
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I'm afraid I had to read this part on ff.net because you have smart quotes on and it didn't get translated correctly here (made my eyes go cross)....
This is horrible to say but just WHEN are Aya-chan and Sebastian getting the hell out of Dodge? They've been leaving for days now and they just seem to keep linger on driving Ran and everyone else nuts.
I'm glad Yoji got to punch out the guy ... but now it's Aya (Ran)'s turn. It will let the boy get a little of his backbone back, even if it does hurt his oh so spoiled sister some.
I had forgotten the last "john who came to harrass Aya" had witnesses to all except the guys demise. So it makes perfect sense the cops would arrive for it, wondering why no one at the shop reported the incident.
Yoji being annoyed (and a little jealous) that Omi and Aya would work in near silence to build the bedside table was cute.
Omi trying to cover for the guys had me chuckling. Again you gave us a chapter that has a little humor, angst, drama and everything else in between. |
Reviewed By: Stardust On: March 10, 2003 20:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
(It's not that I don't like it, it's that I'm incredibly picky.)
I really like how you explore the Y/A relationship (that Yohji has to work at so hard, poor, patient boy); I think you really take psychological factors into account, rather than taking the too-frequent approach of "Oh, some really good sex will make your wrenchingly hideous trauma all better!" I think it's really pretty amazing that you've been able to handle such a potentially painful element seriously and compassionately. (Leastways, I thought so.)
Your characterization of Aya-chan was . . . unexpected at first, but works very well in this fic -- you need someone to be that sour, and she and Sebastian fit the bill nicely (providing the opportunity for more interpersonal tension along the way). I knew there was a reason I never liked her!
Some of the expression is a little awkward -- verb tense switching suddenly, or a pronoun that doesn't have a clear referent -- nothing major. I'd suggest getting a friend to proofread, as well as spellchecking, and that should catch those minor details. (Look, I told you I'm picky. ^.^)
I am amazed at how fast you're able to write this, and that you've had the endurance to keep going. I am enjoying it immensely, and await the next chapter eagerly! You rock! |
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