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Reviewed By: Glaedr [MediaMiner Member] On: March 20, 2008 00:31 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have enjoyed this story so far, can't wait for the updates.
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Title: Epicness
Reviewed By: zerothehero On: March 17, 2008 18:25 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm in love with this story. Honestly Between this and the other Love hina stories and your Negima fan fiction this might be the most enjoyment I've had reading and looking forward to fan fiction. And coming from a internet junkie like me that's a complement. The kitsune and Tsuruko scene was very good and a nice break to see a another h scene besides Haruka and Keitaro(which I'm not getting tired of really I was just getting antsy for more action.) And Keitaro doing Natsume(Which I believe is her name) was classic. Hope Keitaro gets to have a nice romance scene with Shinobu and Mutusumi(my favorite charcters) Although I rarely make requests to authors about the progression of a story due to various reasons if it's not too much trouble and if you didn't already have the entire story exactly planned out I think it would be cool if you did a chapter of scene where each of the girls gets to have like a date or a special thing with just Keitaro and that person. Now I understand due to the way the plot is set up and because you want to write the way you want that sex may not be in all of these scenes I really don't mind because I enjoy your style so much I think it would be cool just to see what you would write for each girl. Also it could be nice just to see a romantic interlude with each character before Keitaro gets hitched(though if you decide and I hope you do that all the girls share him then that would be very good indeed. Anyway keep the good work. p.s. If that creepy teacher even trys to hurt Shinobu I'm sending my army of flying zombie ninja monkeys to attack him. Really though The way you portrayed him was very good and kind of makes you want to feel sorry him for a little while.
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Title: 20-21
Reviewed By: nhoj On: March 12, 2008 12:39 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thanks for the update. I do enjoy how you have Motoko to be such a good writer of those types of novals. Also I wonder why you had Kei sleep with the mother of the woman he is supposed to marry. Ah well you probably have a good reason. Thanks and I can hardly wait for more.
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Title: 20-21
Reviewed By: Tezza1502 On: March 12, 2008 08:33 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Well, once again you have managed to keep me satisfied while driving me up the wall waiting for Keitaro's return to the Hinata. I like the way you are portraying the sexual awakening of the Hinata honies. They are such a repressed little group, aren't they! Of course, dragging out Haruka & Keitaro's journey is a way of ensuring that there will be plenty of surprises to go around when they finally arrive home. -- Hm. Tsuruko and Kitsune share an intimate moment behind the Hinata. (And get sprung by Mutsumi, I think.) Motoko's conversation with her sister later. Both seem to indicate that Kanako & Co. might have less trouble getting the Aoyama's to agree an 'open' marriage than they think. -- It's nice to see Naru begining to think situations through and attempt to see perspectives other than her own, instead of blindly charging in. She's gonna need that skill when Keitaro returns... -- While it was a hot little session, I have trouble believing that Keitaro would not realise that he was in bed with a woman other than Haruka. At least I'm guessing that it was Mutsumi's mother sharing his bed, from the way you wrote the next morning. But that's a minor quibble about another great update. Bring forth the next chapters! T
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Title: ZOMG!!! (Though I have no Idea what the Z stands for?)
Reviewed By: Scico-Jin [MediaMiner Member] On: March 12, 2008 02:46 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Dude! Keitaro banged Mutsumi's Mom! WITHOUT FUCKING REALIZING IT!!!! Seriously, how can that happen? I know Keitaro isn't exactly the sharpest tool in the shed, but come on! 'Sigh' Well if he found out that the woman was not Haru. He would have most likely have sputtered and blushed in embarrassment, lost most if not all confidence. Good thing he didn't otherwise no fucky sucky. Oh Kitsune and Tsuruko muff diving each other was AWESOME. I wonder who emitted the 'OH My' upon discovering the two woman nude and coated in each others juices. I have some theories, but the most likely culprit would be Mutsumi. You are doing a great job on setting the girls up for sharing a husband, as well as one another. It is looking like Keitaro is going to end up with every female currently living at the Hinata Inn, except for Granny Hina and Amalla.(Unless she is a surprise for the end. Which I kinda doubt since she has not shown any interest in him beyond the Incident in the Hot springs. Of course she has not had the opportunity.) Thank you for your time. This has been a message from the local Nutcase, Scico-Jin.
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Reviewed By: Sicksorrow On: March 12, 2008 01:44 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I just read your updated work and wow...is all that I can say. They are coming together nicely keep up the good work!!
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Reviewed By: Bastion [MediaMiner Member] On: March 03, 2008 13:44 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
"Precautionary?" wondered Haruka, her mind re-visiting an issue she had been thinking about from time to time ever since she had chosen to accept her desires. Me thinks you are foreshadowing something here. Hmmm. ;) This deal with Haruka has got me on the edge of my seat. I wonder if what I think you're hinting at happens, how long Haruka can keep it under wraps. However particularly every girl has something happening in her own world that has my curiousity piqued. Not very easy to do, juggling so many different sub-plots and I hope you're not going to end this abruptly since you need at least another 20 chapters when Kei returns to resolve everything. At least to do the subplots justice. Also, I give you alot of credit for taking the concept of Love Hina and turning it on its head. Very compelling how you portrayed the ancient conflict between the families and give some more weight to Konaka's actions (before she was just intrusive, now she's dangerous). That really built some suspense into the story and characters from an otherwise rather mundane atmosphere of the original work. So many props for an excellent story thus far and I hope to see much more from you in the future.
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Title: 19
Reviewed By: tEZZA1502 On: March 03, 2008 06:53 EST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey there! Once again, you have delivered some excelent chapters for our reading pleasure. Is there such a thing as porn WITH plot? If so, this fic is firmly in that catagory. (Somewhere near the top, too!) Poor Seta. I get the feeling that he suspects Haruka has let him go permanently. Although not for who. Maybe he'll find out the next time he visits Sarah. Motoko sitting in on Naru's therapy session. THAT'LL be interesting! As will her reaction to finding out Tsuruko knows about her extra-curricular activities, i.e.: her writing. Shinobu's stalker/teacher seems to be being set up to do something desperate in the future. How bad will it be, I wonder? FINALLY!! The wandering Urashima's make it back to Japan. How will the various brides-to-be react to a more confident Keitaro? How will HE react to all of the girls jockeying for 'visiting rights' to his bed? And how will everyone handle Haruka's vow of greater protection for Keitaro? Can't wait to find out!! Bring it on!!!! T
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Title: What can i say
Reviewed By: someoneelse On: March 02, 2008 23:17 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
again, a quick update and so many chapters. i really am looking forward to what happens when keitaro eventually returns, though it seems he will forever be sidetracked on his "short" journey home.
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Title: Yowza!
Reviewed By: Scico-Jin [MediaMiner Member] On: February 28, 2008 16:22 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yo dude this a great story this right up there with 'Weapon of Mass Destruction' and Hawker_748's works. Yes it is that good. I am also familiar with your works over in the Eva section. I have read them all, except one 'Incubus Succubus'. I am NOT a fan of Asuka doing anything sexual with anybody, but Shinji. Yes I admit it I'm Shinji/Asuka Fanboy. Well not entirely I just can't stand Asuka getting porked by someone that is not our favorite wimpy hero(receives glares from Tenchi Masaki and Keitaro Urashima!) In fact I wish more fics had Shinji/Girl/Girl for the pairing. Hell, Shinji/Harem should be more prominent. Of course that is just my opinion. On a side note after 'The Legacy' is complete. Could you like maybe, do a morning after chapter for 'The Mixer Party'? I apologize if I'm coming off as little too pushy on that request. It's such a good fic and the ending leaves the reader with the feeling of wanting more. Also the aftermath would be quite entertaining. 'Assistance' would also be a good one to add a second chapter to. That one also kinda leaves ya hanging. But that could just be your style for oneshots. Woops! it seems this review has gotten away from me. Any way please consider my requests, for all the readers that LOVE your works. This has been a message from the Nutcase, Scico-Jin.
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Title: WOW
Reviewed By: someoneelse On: February 21, 2008 02:18 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW. so many great chapters in one update. you are truly amazing. those were a series of great chapters. though it is sad that nyamo is being left behind. and it seems like granny hina will be taking care of business. though the appearance of kentaro bodes unwell for naru right?
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Title: WOW
Reviewed By: dennisud [MediaMiner Member] On: February 21, 2008 00:18 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! 4 chapters so quick,its floored me! Hope we DO eventually get to Haru & Kei's return to the Inn. BTW great handling of the obsessed teacher and also of how the students and faculty are seeing him for who he really is! dennisud
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Reviewed By: dragon_cloud16 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 20, 2008 19:06 EST
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Another good set of chapters. Your really went all out with making Shinobu's teacher seem like the stalker type. Add a attempted murder charge with that and he won't be staying for long. Unless he actually killed that person. And with how Keitaro is developing along with the girl's, its easy to see that he will probably end up with nearly all of them that he can. Including Kanako and possibly Haruka or Nyamo.
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Title: Amazing!!
Reviewed By: Sicksorrow On: February 08, 2008 00:14 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent writing so far, the depth of your story is incredible. Keitaro and Haruka had alot of nice scenes, hopefully Haruka and Nyamo won't be the only ones to get some.
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Reviewed By: GrayBear32 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2008 13:14 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellete' once again you have made a vast leap in originality. I was also wondering if i could borrow your Idea on Huruka being a cousin rather than aunt if not I will go with my own ideas and just be kinky as all hell.
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