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| "Legacy" Reviews/Comments [ 178 ] | | Pages (12): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 › » ] | Title: another good way to tie up loose ends
Reviewed By: pak40l46 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2009 00:27 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
excellent chapter to let us readers and fans know about some more loose ends to be taken care of. thanks. i'm still hoping to see keitaro get into kitsune and haruka's pants again before too long. just a little wish of mine(similar to my own FF i'm writing where here gets plenty of both of them) i'll being hanging on until the next chapter. Chris
| Reviewed By: Sentiment Remains On: January 07, 2009 22:33 EST
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Talk about a hum drum wedding, that and Shinobu and Nyamo getting it on with Kei the day after. Pretty cool stuff. Like your other stories I love your writing style keep it up!!
| Title: now that's what i like
Reviewed By: pak40l46 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 07, 2009 18:43 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
it's nice to see shinobu and nyamo have their way with keitaro, now how about kitsune and haruka( before she gets too big). it's nice to see that koalla is back up to her old self, though now as an adult, can't wait to see her and keitaro go at it. also, i may not be a huge naru fan, but i like how she has calmed down. i also like how submissive motoko is to her new husband, and protective too. please don't end this story before some of the kids are born, it would be interesting to see what they turn out like. as i said, kitsune needs some more of keitaro and if you write a tryst with them, make it steamy and very romantic. a whole night of those two going at it like a couple of rabbits would be satisfying. sorry, just that i like that pairing the best. great chapter and i am anticipating your next chapter(s). thanks, chris
| Reviewed By: BlackWolfHowls On: January 04, 2009 04:09 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yet again you exceed expectations on the continuation of this wonderful story. I love how everyone is coming together to make the reality of their plan come to fruition. I'm wondering what conflicts you have planned(if any) in the future for the newly formed family. Looking forward to all future updates.
| Title: Whoa, this is different
Reviewed By: pak40l46 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 01, 2009 19:42 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is a different way to do things at a wedding, one whale of a wing-ding orgy. but, we still have to have a bit more hetero to sate some of the women here. call this chapter done and put away wet. until next time, chris
| Reviewed By: USAVet [MediaMiner Member] On: December 27, 2008 12:11 EST
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Oh yeah, this one was worth the wait. Another well written chapter and it worked REALLY well. Things seem to be progressing at a nice clip so I guess the next stop will be Mol-Mol. If there are other "Weddings" on the horizion I don't know how you are going to flesh them out but Kitsune, Kanako, and Haruka haven't had some type of ceremony yet. Of course they may be falling under the title of concubine. Keep this up. This is a good one and I think it is your longest story to date. Nice work.
| Reviewed By: denisud On: December 26, 2008 21:01 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
There is only one word for this chapter; HOT! HOT font color="red">HOT
| Title: Chapters 51-53
Reviewed By: LainEverliving [MediaMiner Member] On: December 18, 2008 03:26 EST
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Outstanding work as always! It's always a pleasure to read your latest work, especially now as the plot is nicely coming together and reaching (perhaps?) the lead-up to a conclusion. One small comment: Tsuruko and Kitsune have, as of yet, to make any reference (even in passing) to their *encounter* in Chapter 20 to each other, including in the rather extensive bisexual discussion in Chapter 51, and Mutsumi (who at the very least saw the aftermath of what happened) has never mentioned it. It would seem to me that, unless this is being disregarded as a plot element, that at some point Tsuruko and Kitsune have to come to grips with that, even if it's just in a cursory fashion. Furthermore, both of them seemed to enjoy it when it happened before, so it leaves me wondering on that additional front. I'm not necessary asking for a repeat performance (although I wouldn't turn it down...), but some kind of acknowledgement of the incident would only make sense, given the increasingly intimate types of discussions the girls are having. Anyway, setting that all aside, great work! I'll look forward to the next installments.
| Title: oh, so good
Reviewed By: pak40l46 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 16, 2008 12:14 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
as good as ever. good to see nyamo again, her being pregnant might have been a bit much. hey, is natsumi pregnant? great gag about having the pets deal with the two twits(too bad shiro wasn't their) hopefully kitsune gets some more of keitaro, she deserves a good piece of him, she has come as far as naru has. keep up the great writing. as ever, chris
| Reviewed By: USAVet [MediaMiner Member] On: December 14, 2008 20:29 EST
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Oh I had almost forgotten about the rich twit and the twisted teacher. That last chapter is wonderful. Found the lastest 3 chapters to be well written as always and I'm also glad Nyamo is back in the picture. Very good story and I'm enjoying where this is going, at least as far as I can tell from a reader's perspective. Keep this up, it is a gem for sure. Looking forward to the next updates!
| Title: good learning curve
Reviewed By: pak40l46 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 02, 2008 10:05 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
well, this was a very good chapter. motoko and tsuruko got to be with keitaro, although i would like to see more shinobu and kitsune getting a piece of him once in a while. also, that was a good way of resolving the rift between kanako and haruka by having them talk and hash things out. and a little tete-a-tete between those two was a neat trick too. also, since naru has calmed down a bit, give her a reward of letting her have an evening alone with keitaro. that would be a good way of resolving that steamy relationship also. also one more little tryst between keitaro and haruka before she really gets big would be nice, even if it is a quickie, that would please haruka(and me) a lot. i am wondering if Mutsumi's mother will be pregnant, and what about nyamo. please resolve those, oh yes, i forgot about amalla, did keitaro knock her up too? well, you continue to amaze me with your writing and your storylines. 'til your next entry or new chapters. your loyal reader, chris
| Title: Just in time for thanksgiving
Reviewed By: Weapon01 On: November 28, 2008 03:28 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
In summery about Chapter 50. I'm so hard right now, I could beat an elk to death with it. I'd say Keitaro got his Thanksgiving dinner, with all the trimmings, and desert. Keep up the good work!
| Reviewed By: The Ansem Man [MediaMiner Member] On: November 22, 2008 16:27 EST
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You gets massive points for this fic. Unlike your Negima one, it actually addresses and fields all the disturbing implications, and there are less spelling errors to boot. I do wish you the best of luck as you conclude this. The plots you write are masterful.
| Reviewed By: fanficlvr On: November 22, 2008 03:40 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I/ve been rereading the whole fic and I discovered something. Early in the story, Su had stated she was going to marry both Keitaro and Motoko. The later chapters have it as Su marrying only Keitaro and Shinobu. I know That this is a long story but was that change intentional or an accident? Another question is at one point Amalla asked if Keitaro knew the Urashima fighting style. The reponse from Haruka and Kanako was a firm, secretive no. Are you going to explain why Keitaro can't learn the arts?
| Reviewed By: Sentiment Remains On: November 14, 2008 23:06 EST
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Just the same questions Tezza asked... the suspense is killing me. All aside the story itself is just how a harem story should be written; Not too short and unbelievable, but a long and detailed story. Excellent job so far... I can't wait to see more!!
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