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Reviewed By: denisud On: December 26, 2008 21:01 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
There is only one word for this chapter; HOT! HOT font color="red">HOT
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Title: Chapters 51-53
Reviewed By: LainEverliving [MediaMiner Member] On: December 18, 2008 03:26 EST
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Outstanding work as always! It's always a pleasure to read your latest work, especially now as the plot is nicely coming together and reaching (perhaps?) the lead-up to a conclusion. One small comment: Tsuruko and Kitsune have, as of yet, to make any reference (even in passing) to their *encounter* in Chapter 20 to each other, including in the rather extensive bisexual discussion in Chapter 51, and Mutsumi (who at the very least saw the aftermath of what happened) has never mentioned it. It would seem to me that, unless this is being disregarded as a plot element, that at some point Tsuruko and Kitsune have to come to grips with that, even if it's just in a cursory fashion. Furthermore, both of them seemed to enjoy it when it happened before, so it leaves me wondering on that additional front. I'm not necessary asking for a repeat performance (although I wouldn't turn it down...), but some kind of acknowledgement of the incident would only make sense, given the increasingly intimate types of discussions the girls are having. Anyway, setting that all aside, great work! I'll look forward to the next installments.
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Title: oh, so good
Reviewed By: pak40l46 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 16, 2008 12:14 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
as good as ever. good to see nyamo again, her being pregnant might have been a bit much. hey, is natsumi pregnant? great gag about having the pets deal with the two twits(too bad shiro wasn't their) hopefully kitsune gets some more of keitaro, she deserves a good piece of him, she has come as far as naru has. keep up the great writing. as ever, chris
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Reviewed By: USAVet [MediaMiner Member] On: December 14, 2008 20:29 EST
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Oh I had almost forgotten about the rich twit and the twisted teacher. That last chapter is wonderful. Found the lastest 3 chapters to be well written as always and I'm also glad Nyamo is back in the picture. Very good story and I'm enjoying where this is going, at least as far as I can tell from a reader's perspective. Keep this up, it is a gem for sure. Looking forward to the next updates!
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Title: good learning curve
Reviewed By: pak40l46 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 02, 2008 10:05 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
well, this was a very good chapter. motoko and tsuruko got to be with keitaro, although i would like to see more shinobu and kitsune getting a piece of him once in a while. also, that was a good way of resolving the rift between kanako and haruka by having them talk and hash things out. and a little tete-a-tete between those two was a neat trick too. also, since naru has calmed down a bit, give her a reward of letting her have an evening alone with keitaro. that would be a good way of resolving that steamy relationship also. also one more little tryst between keitaro and haruka before she really gets big would be nice, even if it is a quickie, that would please haruka(and me) a lot. i am wondering if Mutsumi's mother will be pregnant, and what about nyamo. please resolve those, oh yes, i forgot about amalla, did keitaro knock her up too? well, you continue to amaze me with your writing and your storylines. 'til your next entry or new chapters. your loyal reader, chris
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Title: Just in time for thanksgiving
Reviewed By: Weapon01 On: November 28, 2008 03:28 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
In summery about Chapter 50. I'm so hard right now, I could beat an elk to death with it. I'd say Keitaro got his Thanksgiving dinner, with all the trimmings, and desert. Keep up the good work!
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Reviewed By: The Ansem Man [MediaMiner Member] On: November 22, 2008 16:27 EST
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You gets massive points for this fic. Unlike your Negima one, it actually addresses and fields all the disturbing implications, and there are less spelling errors to boot. I do wish you the best of luck as you conclude this. The plots you write are masterful.
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Reviewed By: fanficlvr On: November 22, 2008 03:40 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I/ve been rereading the whole fic and I discovered something. Early in the story, Su had stated she was going to marry both Keitaro and Motoko. The later chapters have it as Su marrying only Keitaro and Shinobu. I know That this is a long story but was that change intentional or an accident? Another question is at one point Amalla asked if Keitaro knew the Urashima fighting style. The reponse from Haruka and Kanako was a firm, secretive no. Are you going to explain why Keitaro can't learn the arts?
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Reviewed By: Sentiment Remains On: November 14, 2008 23:06 EST
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Just the same questions Tezza asked... the suspense is killing me. All aside the story itself is just how a harem story should be written; Not too short and unbelievable, but a long and detailed story. Excellent job so far... I can't wait to see more!!
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Reviewed By: Tezza1502 On: November 12, 2008 07:41 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oops! Been a while since I showed some courtesy and reviewed your excellent fic. (Have been busy/wallowing in apathy.) Anyway, I used to think that this was one of the best harem fics I've ever read. Now I know it's the best one I've ever come across! Somehow you just keep pumping out fresh ideas, with interesting twists on old ones. And while several questions have been answered, still more remain. What are Hiatani, Shirai and Kentaro up to? Is Shinobu's old teacher/stalker going to stage a return? How many more of the Hinata Honies will gain buns in their ovens before Keitaro calls for a time out? And will Kaolla become allergic to bananas once she finishes growing up? I can't wait to find out! Later!! T
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Title: great chapters
Reviewed By: pak40l46 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2008 22:04 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
keeps getting better all the time. now that naru and mutsumi are pregnant it will be even more fun. i am glad you had haruka tell keitaro that she is pregnant also. a little nookie with a couple of the girls now and then would be welcome, but still this is a fantastic story. it is also welcome that they are coming together as a large family without too much friction. please, keep up the quality of your writing and i await the next installment(s). Chris
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Reviewed By: USAVet [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2008 21:51 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great update. Three chapters and they seemed a bit short, but very welcome. Things seem to be progressing along nicely and it seems that Naru and Mutsumi are next to the altar with Keitaro. Keep plugging along as this has been an excellent read.
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Reviewed By: Sentiment Remains On: November 08, 2008 15:43 EST
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Taking care of the trash ehh pretty awesome so far love the way everything is coming together!
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Title: loosing trash
Reviewed By: pak40l46 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 07, 2008 21:43 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
great way to take care of people who could ruin Keitaro's relationships. plus, it ties up a lot more loose ends. keep up the great writing.
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Reviewed By: USAVet [MediaMiner Member] On: November 07, 2008 21:35 EST
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Looking good as always. Nice little update and as usual it is well written. Keep going, the story is quite enjoyable.
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