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Reviewed By: Dounka On: January 30, 2012 05:33 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story, it's amazing! I hope you'll continue writing it because it deserves to be finished. |
Reviewed By: nutnatz [MediaMiner Member] On: August 17, 2009 21:16 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am seriously excited about the direction in which this is headed. Not because of the pairings necessarily, but really because of the emotional and psychological depths that you are delving into with the characters. It's also awesome to see a more realistic and less WHOO YAOI! take on Yamcha's struggle. Fanfic writers sometimes cut out the insecurity and denial that comes with being gay/bi-sexual and sometimes degrade it and make it feel sordid and trite. I was also worried that Goku would actually allow himself to leave without saying a word to his wife after he had been dead for a year. Goku may not actually think of her the majority of the time, but the callousness of not even telling her hello before leaving for another planet after being dead for a year? Yeah, as a woman, the divorce by reason of abandonment papers would have been signed at the courthouse by the time he thought it would be prudent to return (which in canon was delayed even further by more training). I love the fact that you have taken a deep look at the bonds each of the characters have at this point in Dragonball. Everything was tenuous at the introduction of the "Goku is descended from a murderous race" plot of the Saiyan saga. It makes me wonder when Toriyama actually decided on that little plot point. Not to mention this was really the point that gave Piccolo his true purpose. I really hope that you are actually going to be updating this soon. I would be very disappointed if this were one of the fics left by the wayside.
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Title: Crossed Paths
Reviewed By: Usakochic On: May 13, 2009 10:05 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
omg! i love this story... please continue
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Reviewed By: sdfsfdsfdfds On: May 08, 2009 22:29 EDT
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:)
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Reviewed By: dssddfs On: April 27, 2009 19:30 EDT
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where's the rest? I found more chapters on another site, but after chapter 8 the links were broken.... :(
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Reviewed By: chiku [MediaMiner Member] On: September 16, 2006 12:55 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is an amaizing story, you really need to update it, pleasssseeeee i need to know whats going to happen..
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Reviewed By: cHeLsEa LaBaR On: July 30, 2006 17:10 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is an awesome chapter! I was wondering how long Bulma could resist Vegeta before she gave in a little. But then she just kind of ran away when she came out of shock. Will Vegeta be able to finish what he started. ^_^ When is Bulma going to find out that Yamcha's kind of attracted to guys? And are Yamcha and Radditz going to get together eventually, just wondering. I hope they do and I also, is there going to be any lemon between Bulma and Vegeta? Well great story! I absolutely love it so far.
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Reviewed By: luna18 On: July 11, 2006 05:21 EDT
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Another great part thanks for the update and now I wait for the next chapter
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Reviewed By: cHeLsEa LaBaR On: June 05, 2006 21:03 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I absolutely love your story. Its very creative and different from other Vegeta/Bulma fanfics. I like how Bulma doesn't back down no matter what. A lot of stories she has absolutely no courage and that just isn't like Bulma at all. I liek hwo Radditz isn't totally barbaric and has emotions to him. Oh yeha that was a very interesting challenge between Vegeta and Bulma, you can definetely sense the stubborness of those two, lol. I wonder if Bulma really is suicidal or if she just can't help baiting Vegeta and Radditz. Well I guess I'll have to find out. Please update soon. I really love your story. You're a very talented writer. sincerely your new fan
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Reviewed By: seiran On: April 13, 2006 03:59 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have longed for a fanfiction like this, it's well written and the story is wonderful. I really like the way this is turning out, and i hope that you guys will keep this up and continue soon. I will be waiting. love lydia
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Title: Crossed Paths
Reviewed By: falconsblade [MediaMiner Member] On: March 16, 2006 17:03 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow. This has been an extremly good read so far. I really like how you have been writing. Exciting and informative. Keeping me interested while not loosing your thread. I especially like how you have been keeping true to the original characters. Others may not approve, but your spin on Yamcha is really good.I hope you know you might be in for some flaming with this. I think its great. Remember, Yamcha is going to be extremely uncomfortable with these feelings. Unfortunatly for him. Dont forget about the others reactions to it. They may or may not approve, but I none of them would reject him. I've read some fic's where a character figures out he or she is homosexual, and the others react quite violently. These people, quite simply, love each other. I don't care how much you don't aprove of a family members decisions, you never push them away because of them.And that's what they are, a family. Please continue. The only reason I gave you a 9 is because of how the story parallels the show. It is not a sign of discontent. I can't wait for more. Later Trish
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Reviewed By: Luna18 On: March 11, 2006 12:16 EST
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I love this fic. The part between Radditz and Yamcha was great. I hope you`ll update soon
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Reviewed By: dbzfanjess On: March 03, 2006 13:25 EST
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nice job with this story... love it!!! ^_^
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Reviewed By: Addict606 (not logged in) On: February 24, 2006 17:33 EST
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Loved it! Radditz is just perfectly in the middle of everything but seems like he would be the only one for the job. Great characterization. Thanks
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Reviewed By: Addict606 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 16, 2006 17:42 EST
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This is great! The characterization is perfect and the story is so believable. Ensemble fics are the best and I can't wait to get to the b/v action. Vegeta's POV is so ture and that's hard to do so congrats! Please update soon I'll be waiting.
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