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Reviewed By: LadyLark [MediaMiner Member] On: August 26, 2004 13:01 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was fun. I really liked the attention to detail when it came to preganancy. The fact that you acknowledged that it is a little gross and messy despite being a fascinating process. Vegeta as the nervous male is a nice change, you kept him in character while dealing with this subject. That and your interpretation of Bulma and Vegeta's feelings about her made me smile. She isn't a shrieking harpy or a shrinking flower like she is portrayed in several fics. She is the strong independent woman who managed to subdue the wild prince. Thank you for the great read!
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Reviewed By: Gohan's Onna (someone is using my name!) On: July 04, 2004 22:35 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, completely excellent. I loved this story! Lol, and you are the first person I have reviewed on mm.org. I loved this story, it was filled with such knowledge! It sounds as if you know what you are doing! Hehehe! I am going to check out your other stories, to see if you have any more glorious ones like this. And if you haven't already, PLEASE, PLEASE continue this! I would read a continuation in a second! I would love to hear about the actual birth process and what Vegeta was going through. You are an excellent author! 10/10!!!!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: pixelgoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: June 19, 2004 02:35 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love your work. Vegeta is still himself, but softened and mellowed by an understanding Bulma. Never been pregnant, never really been around anyone pregnant enough to know about the things you described...but I like that you wrote it as a good thing. Bulma is so happy - none of those cliches of fat and waddling and only a quick mention of morning sickness. Beautiful description of Vegeta coming to terms with fatherhood.
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Reviewed By: vegetaspixie [MediaMiner Member] On: May 29, 2004 16:53 EDT
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Nicely done for a one shot! I really like the way you protrayed Vegetas character and his feelings. I too, liked it when she wanted to do it and he didn't....I usually think of it as Vegeta coming onto Bulma instead of the other way around ^__^; Anyways, great job!
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Reviewed By: Flamingo6584 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 29, 2004 08:26 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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I thouroughly enjoyed this fic. There aren't a lot of stories about this time period. I especially loved the end where she wanted to and he didn't. lol!
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Title: Wonderful Fic!
Reviewed By: Vegge's Mate [MediaMiner Member] On: May 15, 2004 09:45 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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When I read the summary I didn't expect to be enchanted by such a heartwarming gem as this sweet story is. Your conveyance of Vegeta's feelings towards his family is beautifully done. I'm in awe of how wonderfully written and put-together this fic is. It's simply excellent. Keep up the good work. I hope to read more stories from you.
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Reviewed By: jalan On: May 13, 2004 01:18 EDT
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beautifully written, of course. your use of detail creates nice visual imagery. i know nothing about dbz or fanfic, but it is an interesting story. i have to say, though, that i don't like this vegeta guy very much. the wife is clearly you/deb. congrats on your first published fanfic.
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Title: ^_^
Reviewed By: Mushi_azn [MediaMiner Member] On: May 12, 2004 19:00 EDT
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That was great ^____^ I love how you write Vegeta ^_^ It's very original, yet in character :) CONTINUE WRITING V/B!!
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Title: ^_^
Reviewed By: Mushi_azn [MediaMiner Member] On: May 12, 2004 19:00 EDT
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That was great ^____^ I love how you write Vegeta ^_^ It's very original, yet in character :) CONTINUE WRITING V/B!!
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Reviewed By: Salad On: May 10, 2004 12:02 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
A great burst into the fanfic scene and jump out of the ivory tower by an overly educated and broke academic! Welcome and thanks for putting a poignant shot in the arm to the fanfic genre.
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Reviewed By: Amy H. H. On: May 10, 2004 09:15 EDT
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Ahh, what a beautiful, satisfying fic! From this one story, I feel that I 'know' these characters, and I love them. And the last paragraph is just wonderful - I love simple endings that neatly sum up and resolve the focus of the story. PERFECT Mother's Day fic, Deb!
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Reviewed By: MelizaMac [MediaMiner Member] On: May 10, 2004 02:09 EDT
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This is a beautiful fic, Deb! I was a bit hesitant to believe it was your first fanfic, but with your additional writing experience, I guess it was only a matter of time before you merged the two hobbies together. I think you captured the characters, as well as the essence of their relationship, beautifully. Now I know there are lots of other ideas running around in your head - I look forward to all that you'll share with us!
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Reviewed By: musclefreak On: May 10, 2004 00:20 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
breeder sex is so boring. doesn't this guy have a hot alien boyfriend out there somewhere? what does HE think about his lover's decline into straight human sappiness. i think vegeta's concerns about his current and future family roles should drive him to some nice hot male/male sex (believe me, it happens). and you've already got him on a rooftop. i've been there. and aren't these characters supposed to be super human? i wanted more nonhuman stuff--present day, not just remembering amputated tails. i need more action. can't trunks vanquish some horrible fetus-eating monster on the way back from the store and still get his mom's ice cream to her in a timely manner, no one the wiser? enough of the personal perspectives on pregnancy. oh and by the way "The doctor was droning on about the obvious, as if the fool WERE bored with his own lack of expertise." WERE, debbiechan. look it up. it's subjunctive.
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Reviewed By: christabeleve61 On: May 08, 2004 18:22 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wonderful, I loved the way you captured their private moments. A ten +!
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Reviewed By: Gayle On: May 08, 2004 16:13 EDT
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Beautifully written and sweetly intimate. Thanks, Deb!
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