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Reviewed By: FauxGamen On: August 25, 2008 20:50 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Definitely the way to go when dealing with this group of girls. The lack of concern shown by the Wings over the sports girls being messed with didn't feel right, though... Imprisoned for what was anywhere from a week to a month or more in the resort, and having their memories messed with by Eva... Seems a bit more serious than they take it to be. Otherwise, a good fic so far.
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Reviewed By: inuboy86 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 22, 2008 14:01 EDT
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Awesome chapter but what about them getting pregnant that has to be a concern for them and can't Natsumi become Kotaro's partner along with Naba-san?
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Reviewed By: Disgaea13 On: July 31, 2008 16:25 EDT
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Nice. Ayaka and the Sports Girls have been added. Yeah! All that's left (at the moment) is Natsumi and Mana(I'm really looking forward to Mana). I'd just like to add you have written one of the best ways for a Negi/harem to actually happen(While he is still ten)-It's all Chamo's fault and Eva just takes advantage of the situation, how the girls and Negi interact with one another. Seriously this just works, good job.
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Reviewed By: mario123 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 22, 2008 22:44 EDT
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I'm gonna have to say that compared to necessary evil and legacy. this fic is falling short i'm on chp 6, and every thing seems a little forced. You usually keep characters in "lack of a better term" character. I find that there blatant lack of modesty around Negi-kun and Kota-kun doesnt jive until after the reconciliation of the the girls. Just a bit of ranting but still holding onto the hope of a konosetsu ending.
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Title: Great Fic
Reviewed By: J On: July 22, 2008 19:23 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great fic, keep going. im just thinking what would happen if some of them get pregnant.
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Title: mario123
Reviewed By: mario123 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 21, 2008 23:50 EDT
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I am a huge fan of your love hina and Ai Yori Aoshi works. The harems thing is just really good to you. keep it up.I started with chap 1 today and I hope you at least keep the "konosetsu" (Konoka and Setsuna)in mind when your making this?
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Title: A damn good fic
Reviewed By: Newtob Exile On: July 07, 2008 15:34 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
While not number 1 on my list of Best fics ever made, this is certainly on my top 10 in best Negima Lemon Fics ever made. I first knew of your existence when I read you Ai Yori Aoshi "Necessary Evil". From there, I eagerly read all your other fics. While I did this, I was already a fan of anything made by Ken Akamatsu, So you can imagine my immense excitement and joy when I saw you had a Love Hina and Negima story. They are both excellent in my view and very enjoyable readings. Im particularly interested in what you have in store for Asuna and kotaro... I await the new chapters with great expectations!
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Title: Chapter 31
Reviewed By: 2remember [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2008 13:05 EDT
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Is it my imagination, or is Chapter 31 out of place? I mean, when did this suddenly turn into Love Hina?
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Reviewed By: WootMannen [MediaMiner Member] On: June 19, 2008 08:12 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Damn good fic! Poor Negi (or lucky bastard...), it seems like he's going to end up with the entire class at this rate! The headmaster is prolly going to suffer a heart-attack when he finds out that Negi, one of his teachers, has Pactioed nearly his entire class and also been intimate with them! Though, I have a feeling that Negi's old man, Nagi is probably laughing his ass off somewhere... It will be VERY fun to see how the Pactio between Mana and Negi will go. He's almost as terrified of her as he is of Evangeline. Mana, Chachamaru, Kaede and Kû Fei are the ones I want to see get silver-lined cards the most. Though Chachamaru isn't Pactioed to Negi, and thus can't get a silver-line card, she DOES have a crush on him... And didn't you write in one chapter that she is "H-capable" now? Though I think Kû Fei and Mana would be the funniest. Kû Fei because she is, well, Kû Fei and Mana because... Well, because of the awkwardness. Keep up the good work! We really wanna see more of this!
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Reviewed By: Disgaea13 On: June 11, 2008 16:20 EDT
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So Mana has been 'prepared' has she? How will Eva get Negi to form a Pactio with a person he's nearly outright terrified of? Not to mention will the other girls allow it if Mana is only interested in the power up? Also won't this tip Negi and co. off more that Eva is planning something? Also how will Eva get the girls to accept Takane and Mei when they've already decided the Wings are 3-A only? So much plot in one chapter, so many questions. At any rate keep up the good work!
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Title: not so
Reviewed By: eddie_star_wars [MediaMiner Member] On: June 11, 2008 10:52 EDT
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that's not true, negi does have a pact with eva in one of the earlier chapters, when eva takes him away and the others all fight Chachamaru.
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Reviewed By: dragon_cloud16 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 10, 2008 23:08 EDT
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At the rate this fics going, Negi's going to have a Pactio with his entire class. Except Eva, she seems more like a puppeteer then a Ministra Magi. But still, some good chapters and I hope that the next ones will keep the spirit of the fic.
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Reviewed By: 2remember [MediaMiner Member] On: June 10, 2008 20:10 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I've really enjoyed this story! The one thing I've been wondering since I started reading it was just who has miscalculated. I'm getting the feeling it wasn't the rodent... Keep up the good work and update soon!
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Reviewed By: eddie_star_wars [MediaMiner Member] On: May 29, 2008 14:35 EDT
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i agree with seph6. what happened between asuna and kataro
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Reviewed By: dragon_cloud16 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 24, 2008 16:33 EDT
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A good chapter leaving clues to Negi and his partners along with showing more potential ones. Sayo possessing one of Chachamaru's old bodies makes sense but her gaining a pactio already came out of right field. I wonder if Zazie will follow them if Sayo shows up in her new body? Poor Negi, at this rate it seems his entire class will be his partners. His grandfather and the Headmaster will either have a heart attack or a party for getting every magi's dream. I hope the next chapter will come out soon.
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