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Title: Multi-Chapter Review
Reviewed By: Akuma-Heika On: November 08, 2013 11:04 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Kamo actually said that it is usually one partner, and that is because most people only have the power for one. Negi has the power for multiple full contracts in canon...the ending did not help at all though. end of chapter 17 Was there a couple in the shrubs? Or was it Mana? Takamichi's ability is the Silent Fist which uses air pressure not an energy shot. What is the time frame for this? Its after the mini festival but I thought they went to Magicus shortly afterwards. In canon Kotaro's shadow wolfs worked fine for damaging opponents the same way Eva's darkness arrows did. Why did she bring the magical pistol? No abnormally high ambient magic to force its activation. Ayaka is not a half breed aparently...although it is likely she has a Western Ancestor. A grandparent or great one. If you make a Part 2 to this will any of the older women join the Wings? Mana, Takane, and Mei are likely to join but you did show heavy interest from two or three older girls I believe. How is Haruna making money? She owes 200,000 USD and even if she signs every edition and sells them she will make 25,000 USD. She will still OWE 175,000 USD...that is a lot of debt. Does your Setsuna have albinoism as well? White eyes and hair? It was more 50 50 then Negi being lead. CH24 what was Eva's words that Nodoka remembered? If the Sports Quad had been in their two days wouldn't that mean they have lived in the Resort for 30+ days upwards to 50 days? Lost some parts of this review sorry. Curious to what enetered Sayo. It was her decision that the most likely way to find answers to these questions was to join the White Wings. Ch34 It was her opinion not decision. PAru actually was nto in the top 4. Those were Chizuru, Kaede, Mana, and Kazumi in that order. I cannot remember the the order for the rest. Paru is 15 Negi is 9 and a half; how is he too thick? I am also curious what were the the cheer trio doing in such a remote location? “What about the other two?” wondered her fellow Wing. Why did Chisame's contact say other 2 when it is the other 3? Why is it low for Eva to have a circle pre set up? She said kiss so the pactio could be made. How can Asuna be pissed she kept her word? Can Chachamaru still use the Booster system you spoke of or is her artifact said booster system? I believe it was your story that gave Kazumi a secondary ability but what was it? Hope this is continued. Omakes and deleted scenes not so much but a part 2 would be appreciated. You also have more material to use. Thanks for the excellent work! |
Reviewed By: Akuma-Heika On: November 05, 2013 15:00 EST
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Nagi was actually a failure at spells. Only knew 6 spells and had to use notes for them most of the time. |
Reviewed By: Akuma-Heika On: August 09, 2013 03:52 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I read this and I wonder, "Has God taken another prophet?" This story is as if God wrote a fanfic and gave it to a prophet to write down. I will not hold my breathe but am very eager for a continuation of this fic. There are surprisingly few NegiHarem stories and most end up abandoned. THis one was half abandoned all things considered but I pray it is continued. You had at least three more girls to add with a strong suggestion the nurse (Minamoto I believe was her family name) had shown incredible interest in Negi. Particularly sexual interest. There are more girls and several women for Negi to add. Hope to see this. Kotaro is fine in the background thank you very much lol. Chizuru is Negi's! lol |
Reviewed By: Tenhifew On: June 27, 2011 14:17 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story! Well done plot, nice characterization, nice smut- Everything very well done! |
Reviewed By: Talekeeper09 On: June 19, 2009 03:19 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very well written, plausible storyline, characters are, while a bit OOC (well, maybe just a bit looser about sex) stick well to the canon. Shame to see it end.
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Reviewed By: Rubel [MediaMiner Member] On: February 22, 2009 14:58 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Cool Story. Very good characterization. Keep up the great work. Though I do wonder how the next arc will be changed by these events.
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Reviewed By: FauxGamen On: November 17, 2008 23:26 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aww, it's over? Still, it was made of much awesome. Hopefully you will continue with a sequel, but I'm satisfied with the ending. The second half of that last chapter did seem to be rushing to tie up loose ends, but the resolution of Eva's part, which was central to the fic, was well paced. I look forward to a sequel, and even more so to more chapters of Legacy.
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Reviewed By: Highlander On: November 15, 2008 23:20 EST
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I love your story. Please continue with this plot in another story. Maybe start book 2 after this book.
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Title: Addendum
Reviewed By: The Ansem Man [MediaMiner Member] On: November 13, 2008 22:38 EST
Comment/Review:
I should probably mention that there were moments which I found deeply disturbing (didn't Setsuna get screwed in full view of Asuna/Konoka? Asuna watching Ayaka, the complete nonreaction of the girls minus Natsumi sharing?) But that kinda comes with the territory of the fandom, doesn't it?
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Reviewed By: The Ansem Man [MediaMiner Member] On: November 13, 2008 22:34 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thoroughly entertaining! I like how the powers (and all the porn) come together almost seamlessly. It's well composed in every facet. You had some minor spelling mistakes, and the last chapter had some ZOMG SONIC SPEED scene changes which were a bit jarring, but other than that, WELL DONE. So you might do a sequel? I await that, too.
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Title: Author - FFNet
Reviewed By: Zefie Kirasagi On: November 13, 2008 00:16 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
And so the end of this amazing fanfiction has arrived. Hopefully not the end of the story. I've been reading this fic since Chapter 3 first came out, many months ago, and I've been enraptured in the storytelling, immense magic lore, steamy forms of love, twisting but well-woven plot, and the expertly portrayed characters. It saddens me that this is the end of this story, but I sincerely hope that more will come. Please e-mail me if you intend to continue the story, at Asirujunomaehara@hotmail.com And so the chronicles of Negima take on a new and brighter light. ~ZefieK, Author of Fanfiction.Net and AdultFanFiction
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Reviewed By: 2remember [MediaMiner Member] On: November 07, 2008 05:41 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Bravo! Bravo! Encore! Encore!
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Reviewed By: Fel1138 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 07, 2008 04:08 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm a sucker for a harem stories and "popcorn fiction," so I rather enjoyed this from the start. You did an excellent job in covering all the characters, giving them motivations, and keeping them in voice with the anime. The attention to detail is much appreciated, as is the depth of the plot. You kept it moving and gave me reason to actively follow each chapter, as opposed to simply waiting until completion to read. It's a great AU and a truly epic fic. My only real criticism is that it seemed that all to often that someone would try to reach someone else (especially by calling), but very little be would revealed of the ensuing conversation, if they picked up at all. There were also a few issues I had with spelling or grammar, but I tended to ignore them. In short, Miscalculated is awesome, I loved it. I'm looking forward to the sequel/second AU and, as always, keep up the good work. --------------------------------- Hoping for 1994 in 2010.
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Reviewed By: deckman1063 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 06, 2008 22:08 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thanks for yet another good read! Interesting idea, and good finish. I am looking forward to the next idea that you hinted at, there are certainly more places to go with this. My only beef technically is the occasional misspelling, grammar and structure are very good. Good work and thanks!
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Reviewed By: Gigas On: September 14, 2008 01:15 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great Job, please try to update more often.
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