| "Miscalculation" Reviews/Comments [ 48 ] |
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Reviewed By: Talekeeper09 On: June 19, 2009 02:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very well written, plausible storyline, characters are, while a bit OOC (well, maybe just a bit looser about sex) stick well to the canon. Shame to see it end.
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Reviewed By: Rubel [MediaMiner Member] On: February 22, 2009 13:58 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Cool Story. Very good characterization. Keep up the great work. Though I do wonder how the next arc will be changed by these events.
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Reviewed By: FauxGamen On: November 17, 2008 22:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aww, it's over? Still, it was made of much awesome. Hopefully you will continue with a sequel, but I'm satisfied with the ending. The second half of that last chapter did seem to be rushing to tie up loose ends, but the resolution of Eva's part, which was central to the fic, was well paced. I look forward to a sequel, and even more so to more chapters of Legacy.
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Reviewed By: Highlander On: November 15, 2008 22:20 CST
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I love your story. Please continue with this plot in another story. Maybe start book 2 after this book.
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Title: Addendum
Reviewed By: The Ansem Man [MediaMiner Member] On: November 13, 2008 21:38 CST
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I should probably mention that there were moments which I found deeply disturbing (didn't Setsuna get screwed in full view of Asuna/Konoka? Asuna watching Ayaka, the complete nonreaction of the girls minus Natsumi sharing?) But that kinda comes with the territory of the fandom, doesn't it?
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Reviewed By: The Ansem Man [MediaMiner Member] On: November 13, 2008 21:34 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thoroughly entertaining! I like how the powers (and all the porn) come together almost seamlessly. It's well composed in every facet. You had some minor spelling mistakes, and the last chapter had some ZOMG SONIC SPEED scene changes which were a bit jarring, but other than that, WELL DONE. So you might do a sequel? I await that, too.
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Title: Author - FFNet
Reviewed By: Zefie Kirasagi On: November 12, 2008 23:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
And so the end of this amazing fanfiction has arrived. Hopefully not the end of the story. I've been reading this fic since Chapter 3 first came out, many months ago, and I've been enraptured in the storytelling, immense magic lore, steamy forms of love, twisting but well-woven plot, and the expertly portrayed characters. It saddens me that this is the end of this story, but I sincerely hope that more will come. Please e-mail me if you intend to continue the story, at Asirujunomaehara@hotmail.com And so the chronicles of Negima take on a new and brighter light. ~ZefieK, Author of Fanfiction.Net and AdultFanFiction
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Reviewed By: 2remember [MediaMiner Member] On: November 07, 2008 04:41 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Bravo! Bravo! Encore! Encore!
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Reviewed By: Fel1138 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 07, 2008 03:08 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm a sucker for a harem stories and "popcorn fiction," so I rather enjoyed this from the start. You did an excellent job in covering all the characters, giving them motivations, and keeping them in voice with the anime. The attention to detail is much appreciated, as is the depth of the plot. You kept it moving and gave me reason to actively follow each chapter, as opposed to simply waiting until completion to read. It's a great AU and a truly epic fic. My only real criticism is that it seemed that all to often that someone would try to reach someone else (especially by calling), but very little be would revealed of the ensuing conversation, if they picked up at all. There were also a few issues I had with spelling or grammar, but I tended to ignore them. In short, Miscalculated is awesome, I loved it. I'm looking forward to the sequel/second AU and, as always, keep up the good work. --------------------------------- Hoping for 1994 in 2010.
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Reviewed By: deckman1063 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 06, 2008 21:08 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Thanks for yet another good read! Interesting idea, and good finish. I am looking forward to the next idea that you hinted at, there are certainly more places to go with this. My only beef technically is the occasional misspelling, grammar and structure are very good. Good work and thanks!
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Reviewed By: Gigas On: September 14, 2008 00:15 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great Job, please try to update more often.
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Reviewed By: FauxGamen On: August 25, 2008 19:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Definitely the way to go when dealing with this group of girls. The lack of concern shown by the Wings over the sports girls being messed with didn't feel right, though... Imprisoned for what was anywhere from a week to a month or more in the resort, and having their memories messed with by Eva... Seems a bit more serious than they take it to be. Otherwise, a good fic so far.
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Reviewed By: inuboy86 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 22, 2008 13:01 CDT
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Awesome chapter but what about them getting pregnant that has to be a concern for them and can't Natsumi become Kotaro's partner along with Naba-san?
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Reviewed By: Disgaea13 On: July 31, 2008 15:25 CDT
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Nice. Ayaka and the Sports Girls have been added. Yeah! All that's left (at the moment) is Natsumi and Mana(I'm really looking forward to Mana). I'd just like to add you have written one of the best ways for a Negi/harem to actually happen(While he is still ten)-It's all Chamo's fault and Eva just takes advantage of the situation, how the girls and Negi interact with one another. Seriously this just works, good job.
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Reviewed By: mario123 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 22, 2008 21:44 CDT
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I'm gonna have to say that compared to necessary evil and legacy. this fic is falling short i'm on chp 6, and every thing seems a little forced. You usually keep characters in "lack of a better term" character. I find that there blatant lack of modesty around Negi-kun and Kota-kun doesnt jive until after the reconciliation of the the girls. Just a bit of ranting but still holding onto the hope of a konosetsu ending.
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