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Reviewed By: un named On: May 04, 2008 00:42 EDT
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Up date soon I want to see what the older women will do. Also if Negi old friend Anya will come into this
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Reviewed By: dragon_cloud16 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 20, 2008 21:58 EDT
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I enjoy how your setting this fic up. I can't believe that the pactio's are having this much of a affect still. To see Yue and Nodoka wanting sex just proves this. I hope that you'll get the next chapters out sooner along with Legacy.
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Reviewed By: OverMaster On: April 20, 2008 09:30 EDT
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Yeah, I'm anxiously waiting for the update as well, although I'm still disappointed we didn't get to see the culmination of the Negi/Eva mating (maybe in a flashback, or in an, ahem, second encounter?).
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Reviewed By: un named On: April 20, 2008 02:17 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
waiting for update hope its soon
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Reviewed By: DKGafgar On: April 19, 2008 02:44 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very good, original, and well written. I think I saw the occasional typo, but otherwise flawless. Any particular reason why it's listed as "Completed" though?
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Reviewed By: Disgaea13 On: April 08, 2008 14:53 EDT
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Good as always, can't wait for the next chapter! Though your story is very long I think it's better that way, gives the story a realistic feeling, the stories with characters just jumping into eachother's pants for no aparent reason are both a little to common and rather bland. No finesse, you know?
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Reviewed By: dragon_cloud16 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 11, 2008 15:16 EDT
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Evangeline does have a soft spot for Negi eh? At times it seems that this entire event was planned from the beginning. At the very least, Nagi wanted this to happen to Negi and to free Evangelion without doing it himself. This also gets her off his back and onto his son's. But that sounds like something that Nodoka Saotome would do. They were some good chapter and I can't wait for the next ones.
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Reviewed By: dragon_cloud16 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 02, 2008 13:04 EST
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You really went all out with these chapters. But do you really think that Evangeline would stay at the school now that she's free. The only reason I can see is to be with or near Negi. And even then she would have some problems. Hell, the only way I can see her being with him like that is if she makes a pactio with him. But that would explain why she has Chamo drunk in her resort for all we know right now. It seems like this fanfic is going to end soon, so I hope it ends with a bang.
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Reviewed By: dragon_cloud16 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 20, 2008 15:30 EST
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Some good chapters and I hope that the next ones will come out soon. But what's with Asuna and Kotaro? Its like everybody in the White Wings are falling for each other. And why does it seem like Eva is going to bind everybody together to Negi including herself? Or is this another attempt for her freedom? Either makes sense, since she has been stuck by herself with nobody to trust so binding herself and everybody to Negi makes sense.
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Reviewed By: Mike5tone On: February 16, 2008 12:45 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story, with a twist that takes it beyond the typical Negi/whoever pairings. Love the grasp you have on peoples characters, having them do things beyond what they would normally do while still retaining that essential touch that makes them who they are. Incredibly good work, can't wait to read the next chapter!
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Reviewed By: Disgaea13 On: February 13, 2008 02:41 EST
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Hope you update soon. Can't wait to see some Negi/Mana and Negi/Sports Girls Action. Particularly Negi/Akira. Though I have to wonder how are you going to get Ayaka and the others to kiss Negi? Flat out telling them to kiss Negi will be funny. Though Mana will know what's going on right away. Also if Natsumi forms a Pactio with Negi won't she become fixated on him instead of Kotaro? Which ironically he already assumes anyways. None the less this is something every Negima fan has been hoping to see. Well those of us that are perverts anyways. Heh.
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Reviewed By: OverMaster On: February 08, 2008 12:27 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Another two great new installements. I honestly can't see Hakase and Satsuki, as much as I love them, becoming interested on joining the club as mildly hinted, but we will see. Also, looks like you are following the order the girls had for getting Pactios in getting the Negi ride, as well. If so, I guess Nodoka's next, perhaps in a threesome with Negi and Yue, right? I really can't wait for Haruna, Chisame and Kazumi's turns. Also, I hope whatever Evangeline has planned is not TOO evil. Eva works better as a redeemable figure than the being of sheer evil she may pretend to be. Also, it would be a disappointment if all the development Negi and the girls have reached in their relationship turns out to be magic-induced rather than, at least partially, natural character-hormonal growth. Two more questions: 1. At this rate of time displacement with the resort sessions, how long before the other girls notice the White Wings are getting kind of older? 2. Isn't anyone of those who have done it so far concerned at all about Negi getting the girls pregnant? All in all, great job. I'm anxiously waiting for the continuation, for the test, and for who will be taking them.
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Reviewed By: dragon_cloud16 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 05, 2008 19:45 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It was a good chapter but you didn't make any comments on the pactio's when they first changed. Oh well, its nice to know that you might add more to the White Wings. And if Sayo somehow gained the ability to go farther away from the school, she would be a good asset to Negi.
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Reviewed By: seph6 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 20, 2008 20:39 EST
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What happened between Kotaro and Asuna? I am confuse.
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Reviewed By: ChoboChan On: January 18, 2008 05:56 EST
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You know I really hate harems. >< But after your LE fics and this one, your the only writer that I don't mind having it be a harem. That and the side doses of yuri is a big help. =3 Tho I wonder where your going with the Ayaka spying thing. Keep up the good work. d^_^b
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