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| "The Ultimate Antidote" Reviews/Comments [ 173 ] | | Pages (12): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 › » ] | Reviewed By: vasago On: August 31, 2004 09:01 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
you've used a underused crossover and done it well.I like how you've kept ranma and nabiki ic.But changed them enough that it shows they have become changed by there respective experances good work post soon.either jean or rogue for ranma wanda for nabiki
da f | Reviewed By: Matdeception [MediaMiner Member] On: August 31, 2004 04:19 CDT
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Peoples wondered about the reasons Ranma would do such a thing. He has a heart, I wouldn't say he has a big heart, otherwise he wouldn't ever call anyone a bad name. He's sensitive to others pain, but rather impulsive and like most males, ignorant of the pain he does cause until it blows up in his face. As for Ranma owning up to what he did, I can see him doing so in a way, but not telling the girls directly. Xavier sure, Logan sure, and he'll more then likely get punished by them in such a way he'd wish he told the girls. I've debated with the possibility of crossing Evo Xavier with a little bit of Unlimited Xavier. I'll explain that when I finish the next chapter though, it's a rather interesting thought and would surely cause some hell in the story for everyone involved. Unlimited Xavier is scary.
| Reviewed By: Dragon^ On: August 31, 2004 04:18 CDT
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Great fic. My vote for Emma/Ranma match
| Reviewed By: darkbolt On: August 31, 2004 03:55 CDT
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Another great chapter. It's good to see ranma maturing in this story a bit thou i didn't really think he'd actually go and take those pictures because he has such a good heart and the impact that those pictures caused isn't something that he'd want on his conscience. So maybe you could make him own up and get his beating. I think it'd kinda make the x-men less fearful of him if he did that but otherwise a great chapter. Waiting for the introduction of Emma Frost, can't wait to see how you write that. Kepp up the good work
| Reviewed By: DarkKol [MediaMiner Member] On: August 31, 2004 02:45 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great fic. I have enjoyed it so far and look forward to more chapters. I like how you have balanced out the characters and have played with the interactions of everyone. I can't think anything else to comment on so keep writing and keep up the great work.
gre | Reviewed By: G On: August 30, 2004 18:29 CDT
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keep going. we all like where you are going with this fic
| Title: what about stealing? blood?
Reviewed By: darkforceinc On: August 30, 2004 17:52 CDT
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Here are some things I wanted to ask you, writer-man ^^. 1) I wonder if ranma can just head out and do some minor theft from the upscale side of town instead. That is what the style of the silent thief is for after all, and he doesn't really care much about thievery in the manga anyways. He's more than capable of turning invisible, stealing some money, or read some guy's PIN code at the ATM, and then 'borrowing' said ATM card for a minor withdrawal. The amount of money he can get is far beyond what Nabiki is taking in at this point, all without robbing banks. 2)If nothing else, Ranma can steal food. He can easily get sufficient food from various mega-Walmart food stores without anyone even remotely caring if he hit several stores for minor items instead of one big load of stuff. It's much more harmless than the pictures and such. 3) Also, would his blood have medicinal values? Would it help fight diseases if injected into others? Can he sell bits of himself for cash? Seriously, a Ranma-brand serum cure-all would be kinda funny...let him be the first 'snake-oil-saleman' whose product actually works.
| Title: For Warp Wizard
Reviewed By: Matdeception [MediaMiner Member] On: August 30, 2004 17:17 CDT
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You have to understand their point of views. One, they don't have the papers needed for such things as getting a job. Nodoka only enrolled them in school, she never actually handed them the papers, so getting a job with out proper documentation is pretty much nil. With Ranma teaching, it's always been my belief he'd make a sucky teacher in the end, not as bad as say a moron who barely knows how to punch, but just bad. He likes to learn, wands to learn, he's a lot like Ryuu from the street figher series, he is a doer, not a trainer. Remember that old addeage. Those who can, do, those who can't, teach. Also, I've played Ranma's 'attractiveness' as it should have always be played, he's cute, not god awful handsome. Get him with his shirt off while he's sweating though, then you got a fire cracker. Besides, do you really think Nabiki's even emotionally capable at this point of selling her depart sisters fiancee off like that? As for teaching Japanese.. have YOU tried to learn it? It's so freaken unbelievable hard, with Katakana, Kanji,and another differnt language type mixed all into one language. It's hell. Besides, there was a measure of revenge for Ms. perfect from the girls, and now that they have a decent base to build off of, it's likly they will split off into other venues, such as loan sharking, ect. ect.
| Reviewed By: Gopu On: August 30, 2004 17:05 CDT
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Great chapters
| Reviewed By: WarpWizard [MediaMiner Member] On: August 30, 2004 13:49 CDT
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I'm enjoying things thus far, nice to see something other than totally polarized "they're villains and they're heroes". One quibble with the latest chapter: neither Nabiki nor Ranma could think of *any* other way to make money than selling nude pictures of their classmates? Not getting part-time jobs, selling martial arts lessons, selling dates with Ranma, teaching Japanese, etc etc Obviously, I don't expect you to change things, but that struck me as rather lame.
| Reviewed By: Matdeception [MediaMiner Member] On: August 30, 2004 01:43 CDT
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Why is Nabiki hostile with the X-men? It mainly stems from the fact they gave her, and Ranma, a rather rude welcome when they first showed up. Then Jean was getting pushy with her, and was saved by wanda. She's also quite popular and known through out the school as Ms. perfect, and thats just some one I can't stand, personally, and I doubt Nabiki could either. Besides, picking on Jean to win over the Brotherhood is a perfectly viable tactic.
| Reviewed By: goku_90504 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 30, 2004 01:12 CDT
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why is nabiki so hostial aginst the x-men? usually she is smart enough to make her own decision and ranma should understand charles desire to keep his kids safe and respect that enough to give them a better chance with out his mother there pulling strings he should have joined up just for the free food
| Reviewed By: Kuno_Baby On: August 29, 2004 23:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I vote for Emma matchup. Nice thing you got going. I kinda imagine Ranma being nuetral, stopping fights if he comes across them and kicking ass if someone challenges him. I dont think he should join any team. If he is matched up with Emma or Nabiki they should shield him from psy attacks in fights.
| Reviewed By: Matdeception [MediaMiner Member] On: August 29, 2004 21:22 CDT
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Similarities between Dragonlords Evolution fic and this one is to be expected, since that bastard got me interested in Evolution to begin with (Wish he'd finish his fic). The first thing I decided to do in regards to this fic, and Dragons, was remove his godly mutation. Ranma is literally a god in that fic, there is no question of that. He'll literally never run out of energy due to being able to suck in the air molecules around him to power himself. In this fic, I removed that, gave him a rather worthless one that doesn't have much impact - san's Rogue's ability to touch him/ Selene unable to drain his essense. And I incorporated weaknesses, all mental of course. Another difference is the relationship between Ranma, the Brotherhood, and the X-men. Being independant, he's going to enjoy both as friends (even though the X-men really aren't friends right now). As far as the Phoniex thing is concerned, Jean IS the Phoniex, it just hasn't activated yet. Like in all the other series, she's much older when it happens. Anyway, thanks for the words of encouragement, I'm pretty much pumping out a chapter a day, so stay tuned.
| Title: Similar fic?/Matchup
Reviewed By: Ahye On: August 29, 2004 21:14 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
After reading this fic, I found it amazingly similar to a Fic called "Evolution". Chapter 1 is located at: http://www.sfcreators.com/atlantis/FanFic/Other/Dragonlord/Evolution.1.txt And chapter 2 is located at: http://www.sfcreators.com/atlantis/FanFic/Other/Dragonlord/Evolution.2.txt However, your fic seems different enough that it makes for enjoyable reading even having read the previous one. You do a good job getting into the emotions of the characters, and the grammar is good, with only a few errors; none of which are so bad that a person can't figure out what you probaly meant to have typed. Reguarding a matchup, I've always been partial to a Ranma/Nabiki match, however I admit that this story leaves some interesting possibilities open. Rogue seems to be the best choice, due to their compatable mutant powers. However having her as an adopted sister (that is what she is, correct?) might take their relationship into more of a strong friendship than anything else. I also like the idea of Jean being a match. They both have that whole 'phoenix' thing working for them, although Jean isn't Phoenix in this fic. Kitty might actually end up being the best choice believe it or not. With her phasing, she is very hard to hurt, which is something Ranma would be concerned about, although the 'valley girl' attitude is a big negative againt it. As a side note, matching Nabiki up with Nightcrawler would mean that the Tendo/Satome's are joined. Kurt is Ranma's half brother after all.
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