| "Something to Protect - Echoes" Reviews/Comments [ 65 ] |
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Title: Dragon Witch
Reviewed By: Dragon Witch [MediaMiner Member] On: February 03, 2006 15:24 CST
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I am really confuzziled :S . The prologe i do not understand. Did Miroku try to slit his rist or what and why would he? Then what is with the girl at the end? What exacly happened at the village that exploded? And what is Inuyasha on that is making him hullusinate and see Naraku? Once again I am really confused! Could you maybe explain what is going through your head or is this something that we are all going to figure out later. Anyway besides my complete and utter confusion i have to say that i do like the fic. I think you are a very talented writer and i do hope to read more of your work.
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Title: Great story
Reviewed By: kane-sakura [MediaMiner Member] On: February 03, 2006 10:24 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I absolutely love this story. There were a few grammar and punctuation errors, but otherwise it was very good. I especially love the way you describe things. Your simiies and metaphores are descrpitive and make the story all the more interesting. Keep going, I'm hanging on the edge here!
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Title: baka site won't let me sign in!!
Reviewed By: MsAnimeLuva [MediaMiner Member] On: January 25, 2006 18:35 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi!! ^_^ You have a great beginning to your story!! Nice cliffie...you've got me hooked o_O. You know I can't wait to find out what happened Kag. Update soon!! ~_^
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Reviewed By: fallenangel7583~NSI On: January 22, 2006 23:20 CST
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hey. the story is coming along nicely. very interested to see that it wasnt' naraku who nabbed Kagome...but why is inu sensing naraku's jakyi everywhere? don't make much sense...but i'm sure it will later. poor kag...there she is being crushed...and she's worried about her bow. really a good dissociative complex...but accompanied with a near death experiance, it makes sense. good news, inu should make it in time...maybe. bad news, she'll have to answer to him yet again. ::sigh:: man...catch 22 no matter how you look at it. as for kag surpassing kikyo comment; i don't think she has. i think Kikyo still has a lot more on Kagome, only becasue of practice and age. and you're right, kagome hasnt' officially trained with anyone. she kind of trains herself ...so it's realistic, trust me. you're doing great!!!
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Reviewed By: Ayita [MediaMiner Member] On: January 19, 2006 20:05 CST
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Wonderful beginning. I'm hooked. Please keep writing.
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Reviewed By: ladygeri [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2006 22:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OOOOh great story. and i love the cliff hanger. can't wait for the next chapter
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Reviewed By: Baku On: January 17, 2006 21:30 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Dun dun dunnnnn!!!! The cliffie! I really like the style of your writing, and the story's great so far..so yay! Inuyasha no baaakaaaa.Arg.
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Reviewed By: jennykins On: January 17, 2006 19:02 CST
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Okay. Not to be mean or anything, but if you're basing it off the show, then Kagome's been training throughout the series with Keade. Also, her powers are bigger than Kikyou's in the show. Plus, you might want to work on puncuation. You had about 5 or 6 places where they should've been, and weren't. Thank you for the story, and I don't mean to be a bi*ch , but I find constructive criticism better than flattery. To me it means that somebody actually took the time to consider what another person did/accomplished.
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Reviewed By: jennykins On: January 17, 2006 18:42 CST
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I love it! I'm so glad that sueric recommended you in her last chapter of Purity 5. The only thing is that you might want a smaller, blanket disclaimer at the end of your chapter. It makes for easier reading.
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Reviewed By: artemiswaterdragon [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2006 15:05 CST
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Holy. This is pretty good! Keep it up ne? What will happen to poor Kagome-chan?
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Title: i love it
Reviewed By: kitsunesan [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2006 12:58 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it please update! one of the loyal fans ^_^
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Reviewed By: LadyOrion(notsignedin) On: January 16, 2006 06:40 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AAAACCCCKKKnnooooooo! nota fair place to stop. You keep on draginging me further into your web and then POOF i fall from a cliffie. more por favor
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Reviewed By: LadyOrion(notsignedin) On: January 16, 2006 04:44 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
HOOOKED THAT IS WHAT I AM!!!! A very intreaging and powerful chapter.
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Title: prologue-chapter 2
Reviewed By: lavie [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2006 22:24 CST
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i found your fic from it being nominated for Best Canon Fic in The Inuyasha Fanfiction Guild Yahoo group. ok, now for my comments: well, um, i don't get the prologue... anyway i kind of skimmed parts of it and since i missed the part where you said it takes place after the last episode of the anime i was kind of confused for a bit but i eventually figured it out... also, in your glossary you spelt Hiraikotsu wrong; and in ch 1 if you want to be correct, it's not "mischeivous" but 'mischievous', "tickeled" (i think this was just a typo), and Shippou (7 treasures), which is a play on shippo (tail) ['ou' is usually pronounced where the 'o' sound is prolonged for twice that of a single 'o']. anyway, despite your seemingly long beginning notes i was pleasantly surprised to find a story worth following, i hate it when i have to read a long note before i start reading a new story and then when i finally get to start reading, i find that i had just wasted my time. ok whatever, anyway, you should probably put your request for feedback at the end of a chapter where someone is more likely to read it. Now a bunch of punctuation notes: you should probably put a comma in "Inuyasha was probably furious[ ] she thought", and "They must have heard Shippo Kagome thought". '"Houshi-sama", Sango stammered' - you might want to actually write 'Houshi-sama' the way Sango would have actually said it. "My apologies[put a comma here]", and all similar occasions. "Miroku said[put comma here] giving an amused smirk". finally, i will look forward to your next chapter. ja!
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Reviewed By: stardragon [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2006 22:19 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good Job. I like the cliff hanger you ended with. I look forward to more of your story.
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