| "Something to Protect - Echoes" Reviews/Comments [ 65 ] |
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Reviewed By: ladygeri [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2006 22:06 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OOOOh great story. and i love the cliff hanger. can't wait for the next chapter
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Reviewed By: Baku On: January 17, 2006 21:30 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Dun dun dunnnnn!!!! The cliffie! I really like the style of your writing, and the story's great so far..so yay! Inuyasha no baaakaaaa.Arg.
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Reviewed By: jennykins On: January 17, 2006 19:02 CST
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Okay. Not to be mean or anything, but if you're basing it off the show, then Kagome's been training throughout the series with Keade. Also, her powers are bigger than Kikyou's in the show. Plus, you might want to work on puncuation. You had about 5 or 6 places where they should've been, and weren't. Thank you for the story, and I don't mean to be a bi*ch , but I find constructive criticism better than flattery. To me it means that somebody actually took the time to consider what another person did/accomplished.
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Reviewed By: jennykins On: January 17, 2006 18:42 CST
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I love it! I'm so glad that sueric recommended you in her last chapter of Purity 5. The only thing is that you might want a smaller, blanket disclaimer at the end of your chapter. It makes for easier reading.
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Reviewed By: artemiswaterdragon [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2006 15:05 CST
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Holy. This is pretty good! Keep it up ne? What will happen to poor Kagome-chan?
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Title: i love it
Reviewed By: kitsunesan [MediaMiner Member] On: January 16, 2006 12:58 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it please update! one of the loyal fans ^_^
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Reviewed By: LadyOrion(notsignedin) On: January 16, 2006 06:40 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AAAACCCCKKKnnooooooo! nota fair place to stop. You keep on draginging me further into your web and then POOF i fall from a cliffie. more por favor
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Reviewed By: LadyOrion(notsignedin) On: January 16, 2006 04:44 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
HOOOKED THAT IS WHAT I AM!!!! A very intreaging and powerful chapter.
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Title: prologue-chapter 2
Reviewed By: lavie [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2006 22:24 CST
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i found your fic from it being nominated for Best Canon Fic in The Inuyasha Fanfiction Guild Yahoo group. ok, now for my comments: well, um, i don't get the prologue... anyway i kind of skimmed parts of it and since i missed the part where you said it takes place after the last episode of the anime i was kind of confused for a bit but i eventually figured it out... also, in your glossary you spelt Hiraikotsu wrong; and in ch 1 if you want to be correct, it's not "mischeivous" but 'mischievous', "tickeled" (i think this was just a typo), and Shippou (7 treasures), which is a play on shippo (tail) ['ou' is usually pronounced where the 'o' sound is prolonged for twice that of a single 'o']. anyway, despite your seemingly long beginning notes i was pleasantly surprised to find a story worth following, i hate it when i have to read a long note before i start reading a new story and then when i finally get to start reading, i find that i had just wasted my time. ok whatever, anyway, you should probably put your request for feedback at the end of a chapter where someone is more likely to read it. Now a bunch of punctuation notes: you should probably put a comma in "Inuyasha was probably furious[ ] she thought", and "They must have heard Shippo Kagome thought". '"Houshi-sama", Sango stammered' - you might want to actually write 'Houshi-sama' the way Sango would have actually said it. "My apologies[put a comma here]", and all similar occasions. "Miroku said[put comma here] giving an amused smirk". finally, i will look forward to your next chapter. ja!
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Reviewed By: stardragon [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2006 22:19 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good Job. I like the cliff hanger you ended with. I look forward to more of your story.
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Title: inuyashaloverr
Reviewed By: inuyashaloverr [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2006 22:08 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, so far, so good. I had'nt known of your story till Sueric recommended it. And I like what I've read thus far.
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Title: Sue's Recommendation
Reviewed By: MouF [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2006 19:43 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
On Sueric's recommendation in her forum, I've decide to take a curious look and read your story. And so far so good! Your prologue intrigues me and I can't wait to see how you will procede to take us there! MouF
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Reviewed By: tiffani On: January 15, 2006 16:08 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think that its a going to be a good story. The way you portray the characters is acurate and I love them. I can't wait to find out what happened to Kagome. Anyway, I wonder what she'll do about the whole being trained as a priestess. Maybe she could read up on it and teach her self. I think she could be a 21st century priestess, new and improved.
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Reviewed By: fallenangel7583 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2006 15:58 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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wow. that was well done! i'm on the edge of my seat eagerly awaiting more. i always said that one day kagome would use that damned spell then regret it when he couldn't save her. glad someone else agrees as well. very well done! at least someone will believe him now about naraku being around. you have a good grasp on the characters, though i am so confused by the prologue and a part of me is scared to find out just what is going on. but next to that, very well done! can't wait to read more!
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Reviewed By: Angelswrath [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2005 23:09 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
just checking to see how this thing works
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