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Reviewed By: anon2 On: October 11, 2008 13:24 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
If Shinobu needs to find other ways to please Keitaro, she should have Kaolla teach her how to use her feet. :D Great story so far~
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Title: good tie ups
Reviewed By: pak40l46 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 10, 2008 23:03 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
excellent job of tying up loose ends. Hina is such a pistol. and, now i know Haruka is pregnant for sure. i wonder she'll let the cat out of the bag and tell everyone else. i can't wait to see what you do next Chris
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Reviewed By: Sentiment Remains On: October 08, 2008 01:27 EDT
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So far the story seems to be coming at an end, with Keitaro and the girls getting the ceremony prepared. Overall excellent writting I've been missing updates cause of work...Looking forward to more!
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Reviewed By: USAVet [MediaMiner Member] On: October 01, 2008 21:17 EDT
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Getting down to the brass tacks here. I see Kaolla is waiting until after her ceremony, potentially. Going to be interesting on how Keitaro, Naru, and Shinobu will deal with their families to say nothing about the elders of the Ayoma family. Been a fun one since the start and borderline torture awaiting the next chapter(s) release. Well written and it still flows very nicely. I'm curious what the former teacher will do and what his current mental state is. I have a feeling that the upcoming lemons will involve more than just Keitaro and a single girl. Keep it up and please try not to keep us haning so much ;) Great job.
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Title: better and better
Reviewed By: pak40l46 offline On: September 30, 2008 23:56 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
you are better at this than the original author. and i have to say, that it will be a pity when this fic end. the people in this story are extremely well fleshed out and that you have brought them to life very well indeed. i hope keitaro enjoys the knowledge that he is a father and the haruka loves him absolutely. plus with all the ceremonies coming up, our keitaro is going to be a busy man (and an exhausted one too). to bed that many women, hope you give him the stamina and a bottle of viagra. and, my enjoyment of this story(and one similar in ai yori aoshi) is total, you have inspired me to write my own fanfics. thank you, chris
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Reviewed By: Bookworm4evr On: September 21, 2008 00:21 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I don't normally write reviews but I do enjoy your writing. Especailly the way the characters seem more real than a lott of the other writers protray them. I am most looking forward to what the Urashima curse is and what you've done about the annex is very intrigueing. Another item I hope you will explain is why Keitaro cn't practice the Urashima arts. I the impression that even Amalla will be part of the marriage and Nyamo also. Keep up the great work. I hope in the furture you can do a story from Tenchi Muyo GXP. I believe you could have a lot of fun with that anime.
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Reviewed By: pak40l46 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 16, 2008 05:59 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like this re-write. Let's see: Haruka, Nyamo, Mrs. Otohime, Kanako, Naru, Motoko, Amalla, Mutsumi, Tsuruko and now Shinobu. Just leaves Koalla left. Thanks for making it special for Shinobu, she deserves him the most. It would be funny if they all had sons and those boys re-energize the Urashima clan into a dominant power in Japan. Just a little FF of my own. Can't wait to see the next installment. Chris
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Reviewed By: pak40l46 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 15, 2008 07:52 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent tryst between Keitaro and Shinobu, as she really wanted him. Thank you for doing a great job on making it a tender love meeting with those two. And, it was nice seeing all the other girls so supportive. This is the best Fan Fiction I have ever read. Chris
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Reviewed By: ShadowFang357 On: September 12, 2008 06:30 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please hurry up with next chapter. longer chapters and more Lemon is nice. and let it be more Tsuruko Lemon please
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Reviewed By: pak40l46 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 11, 2008 21:20 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Two are left, as Tsuruko is claimed by Keitaro. Excellent chapter, good especially with tying up a few more loose ends. Hopefully you'll let Haruka at him again. I can't wait to read more soon. Thanx, Chris
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Reviewed By: anon52534 On: September 01, 2008 20:50 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
So it seems that there are going to be quite a lot of pregnant girls in keitaro's harem. Haruka, motoko, naru, mutsumi. well that's good i guess.
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Reviewed By: pak40l46 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 01, 2008 10:17 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
another enjoyable three chapter, man you are good at writing these stories. looks like 2 more have been had, now that only leaves 3 left. Hey, stop frustrating Haruka from wanting some more of Keitaro and let Motoko have some more as well. Again, great story. Chris
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Reviewed By: USAVet [MediaMiner Member] On: August 31, 2008 23:01 EDT
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Oh yeah a very welcome update. Amalla and Mutsumi in one update too. Wow, very well done. Great writing and there seems to be some more foreshadowing going on. So with that in mind we can count as pregnant Naru, Motoko, Haruka, and Mutsumi, unless of course she took some precautions. So that now leaves Tsuruko, Su, and Shinobu. Looking forward to more. Please keep up the good work.
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Reviewed By: Sentiment Remains On: August 24, 2008 00:53 EDT
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So far I like how your tieing loose ends here and there dealing with the delinquint duo known as Haitani, & Shirai. Your doing great can't wait to see whats in store for Keitaro next!
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Reviewed By: pak40l46 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 17, 2008 03:07 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
nice short chapter. glad to see that Haruka is happy about being pregnant. i hope all the other girls like it too. i hope Motoko slaps the snot of the two losers. also, i hope Shinobu and Akiko do well on their tests. I hope to see more soon Chris
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