| "Slave" Reviews/Comments [ 821 ] |
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Reviewed By: NYLACE [MediaMiner Member] On: May 16, 2003 01:29 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Too much suspense....need more story....update ASAP |
Reviewed By: Night Kitsune [MediaMiner Member] On: May 15, 2003 15:53 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG...I can't believe the king is dead...did Ilandra really kill him?! I was having a horrible day today and reading this fic made me feel a lot better. Please update as soon as you can! ^_^ |
Reviewed By: Da Bomb On: May 13, 2003 16:45 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hehe I love this story u always have a twist or turn somewhere just when we get comfy with whats going on. I think Brolly just covering up for him self or is he *dun dun dun* who knows but u and your beta reader if u have one.
Ja ne for now
Da Bomb |
Reviewed By: xXbaOwEyXx On: May 13, 2003 03:36 EDT
Comment/Review:
AHHH!!! NOOOO!!! THE STORY!! THE STORY IS SO DAMN GOOD!! you have to update sooooon plzzzz!!!! damn brolly...what a stupid person.... and vegeta...uh oh....is vegeta starting to have feelings for bulma?! ...hmm... hehe..well anyways your fic is the best B/V ever!! keep up the good writing...n lemons...and plz update SOON!!! |
Reviewed By: LucrezaBorgia On: May 11, 2003 03:55 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
run on sentences. resist the urge to put too much information in one sentence. dont be afraid to break them up. some phrases could be better done in a slightly diff order.
creativity is super and is very in character. u can actually feel the characters how u write them. |
Reviewed By: amy On: May 10, 2003 17:44 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
let me start off by saying that i adore this fic! that cliffhanger was mean though...how could you leave off like that! but i can't wait to read some 'bulma trying to comfort vejeta' sex! |
Reviewed By: ssj trungeta [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2003 17:50 EDT
Comment/Review:
Damn writers and their cliff hangers!!! Please God update soon! |
Reviewed By: J. Bird On: May 16, 2003 20:37 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your writing style is definitely good, and the plot rawks. I was reading it on FFN, so I was jumpin' with joy when I found out 21 chapters of it were already on mediaminer.org. Heh heh, me jumpin' for joy. Ummm...yeah. Your fic is awesome, so update it. yay |
Reviewed By: kris On: May 08, 2003 13:13 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this story! It keeps my interest and is fun to read! Please Update soon!! |
Reviewed By: Legana On: May 08, 2003 12:15 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
bloody hell!
GREAT Chapter!
TERRIBLE TIMING TO STOP though =)
PLEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAASEEEEEEEEEEE UPDATE SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
It was SO exciting!!!!!
Looking forward until the next chappie!
this was a great chapter =)
I wonder what comes next....
don't let us wait too long ok??
Hug, Legana!
*still trips over the chapter* |
Reviewed By: mischief maker [MediaMiner Member] On: May 08, 2003 10:01 EDT
Comment/Review:
Uh oh. This is a most unexpected situation. Bulma's in the middle of it, and what the HELL is Vegeta going to think about all this? Aahh, update soon. I hope Bardock's going to be alright. |
Reviewed By: Trunks Lover On: May 08, 2003 00:57 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, that's not very nice. Leaving me hanging like that.Update soon, I'm wanderin' what's gonna' happen, so, don't leave me hangin'. |
Reviewed By: Koaitan Princess On: May 08, 2003 00:55 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, that's great. Stupid Brolly. I don't trust him. But then again, I don't trust myself, so, update soon, so I'll know weather or not I've gone over the edge.
Kaoitan Princess |
Reviewed By: Koaitan Princess On: May 08, 2003 00:55 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, that's great. Stupid Brolly. I don't trust him. But then again, I don't trust myself, so, update soon, so I'll know weather or not I've gone over the edge.
Kaoitan Princess |
Reviewed By: Saiyan Princess On: May 08, 2003 00:53 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ahhhhh, wow. That's great. What's Brolly up to? I don't trust him for some odd reason. Please update soon, I need to know what's going to happen.
Saiyan Princess |
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