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Reviewed By: leilachan [MediaMiner Member] On: July 08, 2005 13:54 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh nooo. now kag is missing. is sango next? ^_' wow, i think it's cool kagura and kag are preggo together. i can't wait to see how the kids turn out. this fic is so fun. bye 'till the next update.
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Title: Enjoyable read
Reviewed By: Amie On: July 07, 2005 02:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm enjoying your fic. It's stream-lined, but with enough description to be interesting. You're good at setting up situations and handling the small details that keep subsequent events logical and lucid. Your citrus elements are arousing without being overly purple or mawkish. Good work! I'm very interested in reading to the conclusion. Your writing efforts are much appreciated! Merci!
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Reviewed By: WoodShop2300 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 06, 2005 04:18 CDT
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Thay just seemed way to easy to get sess back to mostly normal.. great job on the last 9 chapters though. O and BTW what parts of inu's memory are still missing and if as you say say they are large chunks then shouldn't he still be uninformed about thinks.. like maybe telling shippo to watch out and keep an eye open.. dono twas just a suggestion but it seems for being worth mentioning it plays no roll
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Reviewed By: Cougiecat On: July 05, 2005 21:35 CDT
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And also- because my first review is always too critical, I'd like to say that I LOVE how you did Sango and Miroku. They are very cute together, and Sango's fear that she isn't Miroku's true love is very reasonable since they don't even have the adverntures and experiences of their journey together. her father though.. grrr... someone needs to sit down and give him a talk. And Shippo in the final battle was wonderful. The Inu/Kag relationship round 2 was great too. Though I think Kagome might wonder at some point how Inu has a house next to a mansion on an Assistant Teacher's Salary.
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Reviewed By: Cougiecat On: July 05, 2005 21:14 CDT
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Excellent story. Love your writing style and it is fun how you have the plots parallel. Kinda sad that Kouga had such a sucky role this go round. Makes it seem like though Kagome's wish included Ses, it didn't include Kouga (though I guess it only included the Inu-tachi). You do an excellent job with lemons, limes, and the emotions realted to them. You characters are different from those in the anime, but that is because they have very different lives. I do like how you did Shippo though. The one portion of the story that did not live up to its potental was when Inu lost his memory. In your time line, he would have asked her to be his in just a few days (granted that was because he thought they might die, but...). He wakes up and all the fears and worries he's had for years have already been taken care of- AND he got the girl. 'course he doesn't remember that stuff, and there's the issue of being stuck in the wrong time period- in the wrong life, but well... I can picture him being angry and confused, but also.. incredulous. Anyway, the week in a tree seemed a bit exagerated, because all in all things arn't too bad for Inu and he'd probably want to figure out a bit more about this relationship thing. As far as figuing things out goes, Inu's shy I don't really see him wanting to skip bases. So um yeah- woulda liked it better if it had started faster and progressed slower with a lot more uncomfortable shy Inu humor (because I love torturing him). Great story! Update soon!
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Reviewed By: leilachan [MediaMiner Member] On: July 01, 2005 01:37 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i am so digging this fic. i think a preggo kag is just what we needed! ha. happy b-day. i won't be 25 'till october. (ya old fart) ~_* i am so ready for the next chap. update when you have a chance. i'll be waiting.
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Title: great
Reviewed By: stephmote On: June 30, 2005 20:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It is about time that she got pregnet and love how u had kagura get kiddnapt. keep up the good work
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Title: Happy birthday
Reviewed By: Taidu On: June 28, 2005 21:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey happy birthday and I love your fic I'm just getting done readign the last chapter and hope you update soon ^_^
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Reviewed By: Alex458 On: June 27, 2005 22:45 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your Story is awsome! I love the conflicts that are going on. I like that the couples actually take the time to work things out. -Keep Going :)
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Reviewed By: katiepatie (not logged in) On: June 27, 2005 13:55 CDT
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HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!!! I love this story! Great job.
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Title: First impressions
Reviewed By: himeg [MediaMiner Member] On: June 27, 2005 10:27 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am caught up on the whole story but I would just like to comment on your first chapter. As you already know first chapters are the first impression a reader gets in a story. I just wanted to say that I think yours was flawless. I don't write fanfics anymore but when I did I always aganoized over the first chapter knowing it would make or break the connection with the reader. It's nice that you go into actual character development. And the story itself is interesting and not just filler and hentai. Well I guess that all the gushing for now. Hope you had a happy birthday and I eagerly await your next chapter.
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Title: WOW!!!
Reviewed By: alize On: June 27, 2005 00:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this story is awsome!! today is the first day that i have read it and i have to say i love it. you are a gifted writer, fantastic even :-) i do hope you update again soon. i would love to see this fanfic all the way to completion. oh by the way happy birthday.
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Reviewed By: TuxedoUranus89 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 25, 2005 20:25 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Mmmm, a bit of everything here, some citrus, suspense, angst... kudos!!! Love it, and desperately waiting for more!!! Happy birthday!!
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Title: so good
Reviewed By: jo_doll On: June 22, 2005 02:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey im waiting when do inuyasha and kagome have a pup come on type type type o the story is really good im really looking forward to the rest of the story!
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Reviewed By: The Mally Figure On: June 21, 2005 22:19 CDT
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oooo i love this story its so good please continue!!!
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