| "The Ones They Take For Granted" Reviews/Comments [ 97 ] |
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Reviewed By: Kichi On: July 09, 2003 09:18 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this fic, i don't care about the short chapters anymore as long as a chapter comes out, I'm happy. and i know this isn't going to end happily but it doen't stop me from hoping! |
Reviewed By: Goku's Goddess [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2003 01:31 EDT
Comment/Review:
Loved it!
It always makes me happy when ya update!
... don't know what else to say.... |
Reviewed By: Mistress Vejita On: July 08, 2003 20:30 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
THANKYOU, THANKYOU, THANKYOU!!! *is doin' the happy dance* I was so excited when I saw the E-mail update. I think I scared the hell outta my family when I just, all of a sudden, jumped up from the 'puter and shouted "WHOOHOO!" really loud. *sheepish grin*... This was awesome, beta or not! I'm just so happy you put this up! ^_^ Ghods, this whole fic is awesome! The emotion and intensity are just incredible. You've kept the charactres very real as well and I am so hopelessly in love with Goku this way. He's soo hot! *drools all over Goku* You've made Vejita really cool too. What can I say? I'm at your feet... ::family is STILL looking at me very strangely:: ^_^ Till next time, Ja... |
Reviewed By: Zorella On: July 08, 2003 17:38 EDT
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Oohh... yay! I love this story ^_^
There are so many possibilities with the ending.. they could all be blown appart when Goku's ship malfunctions and explodes, or a rare disease could turn them all into zombies.. or Goku could just not leave, Chi Chi could die from a heart attack and Gohan could get amnesia :D |
Reviewed By: AMCM74 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 09, 2003 01:00 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I cant say how delighted I was when I heard you had updated! As always love the fic, your Goku is always so powerful and emotional. Of course I adore that! Until next update. |
Reviewed By: autumn [MediaMiner Member] On: April 17, 2003 23:35 EDT
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Great insight into Videl and realistic feelings regarding their married life. How can he expect things to just go on like always? And doesn't he realize that they way it was wasn't working? Poor Videl. I really feel for her. Looking forward to Goku's POV next chapter. :) |
Reviewed By: Shade_Knight_A [MediaMiner Member] On: April 16, 2003 13:54 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hum what does Gohan have in mind. If I go by the male point of veiw. The quike fix way of things. I would just go to the Dragon and wish for a second chance to keep from messing up my Marriage. And my old author spirt with my twists and turns would have Gohan find the Dragonballs and atempt to make the wish to restore his Marriage only to find out that he has already made that wish once before.
Musical selection for the next Chapter: "Love is a Battlefield" by Pat Benatar
Sense Videl mentioned it the song has been stuck in my head lol. Great chapter. And I do like the longer chapters and if it is doesn't make a differance in the time between updates then yes.
Shade_knight@msn.com |
Reviewed By: SSJ Courtney On: April 10, 2003 16:27 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is the best fic ever! I love it! |
Reviewed By: Kichi On: April 08, 2003 09:34 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yes, I love this fic, but after the wiat for each chapte you better believe that i want it to be longer! And if you want to stick to one POV for each chapter that's you decision but i always liked them going back and forth because right now i'm really wanting to know what Goku's thinking. |
Reviewed By: MelizaMac [MediaMiner Member] On: April 06, 2003 23:39 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
There's a lump in my throat, Pareathe. This is so sad. Of course, it's always touching when the dipstick... I mean guy wants to make things work out. And I really understand Videl's need to make things as easy on her daughter as possible.
But crap - we're talking about Goku here, folks! The opportunity to be stuck in space in a little spaceship with just him... well, need I say more? ;-)
Please, Pareathe, make it a happy ending... |
Reviewed By: dbz obsessed On: April 06, 2003 21:46 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sorry I didn't review sooner. This was such a touching chapter with Videl so concerned about Pan. But why is Gohan so clueless especially for such a smart guy? I know Goku wasn't in this chapter but you have to think about all he is going thru right now before he leaves. And yes, Pan better get to see Goku before he leaves. Is he really leaving? Oh, on the matter of long chapters...I take all I can get an soon as I can get it, so if your friend says your chapters are too long, suggest to her to set aside a part of it and read it later cuz the rest of this fan wants to find out what is going to happen unless that lengthens this time it takes to post. Then post sooner and shorter. |
Reviewed By: Calendar On: April 06, 2003 21:18 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow... I love this fanfic so much... I can't believe you updated! I've been hoping you would, and have been checking every day for the past few weeks. (I actually read this chapter the day it came out, but I couldn't review it because I was at school and the review section was blocked off.)
I'd've liked to have that longer chapter, but I suppose I'll have to be satisfied with what I've got, eh? Really, I want a conclusion! Videl and Goku need to end up together and live happily ever after... but you bring up very good points from a writer's point of view.
"And what about Chichi? I know she doesn’t qualify for wife of the year, but I’m sure she loves Goku in her own way. How would she handle it if she knew her husband had an affair with her own daughter-in-law?"
VERY good point, and something an IC Videl would worry about, as well as the following paragraphs about Pan. Stunning writing, there. But I still can't hope but wish that she realizes that pain is relative. Chichi would be devastated, but what about when Goku leaves? She won't have him anyway, and if Goku stayed, he'd be unhappy. But you'll deal with that in your own way, I'm sure. I hope to see the conclusion soon...? *begs*
Anyway, I'll end this now! Wonderful chapter to an amazing story! ^-^ |
Reviewed By: fusionHA [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2003 12:49 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
DAMNIT! I'm so hooked on this fic it's sick! I LOVE the characterization and it's a brilliant way of developing Videl, Gohan and Goku. Like I've said before, this is fucking amazing and I will hunt you down like a dog if you make us wait five more months for the next update again ^_^
I admire you as a writer and as an inspiration and I think you have more talent than you know what to do with! ^_^ Please write the end of this before I jump out a window and I will be waiting anxiously for the next chapter!
~djFusion |
Reviewed By: Bardockgurl [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2003 05:29 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh, that was so worth the wait!! Huh, Goku was only mentioned, and still I fell in love with him again... *sighs dreamily*... I didn't feel cheated by the short chapter, I enjoyed the long ones, but everything seemed to fit, and the end felt natural. I'm really looking forward to the next one - whenever it's ready to come out! Things this good are ALWAYS worth taking time over. |
Reviewed By: zorella On: April 04, 2003 03:55 EST
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ahhhh...I none of the authors I'm following have updated for months, so you made my day Pareathe :D I was worth the wait.
As for chapter lenghts, personally I like long chapters, but it depends on the story. I think that a combination between this chappy length and your previous ones will keep everyone happy ;) |
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