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| "Sachi" Reviews/Comments [ 535 ] | | Pages (36): [ « ‹ 16 17 18 19 20 21 22 23 24 25 26 27 28 29 30 31 32 33 34 35 › » ] | Reviewed By: xbitternessx [MediaMiner Member] On: September 08, 2006 03:36 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This fic was recommended to me by a friend, and I'm so glad I listened! I'm hooked, when I should really be writing on my own stuff. But oh well, right? It's awesome, keep up the good work!
| Reviewed By: Tarzan14 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 08, 2006 00:30 PDT
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yay an update! i thought this chapter was pretty good and inuyasha's pov was good and detailed. He's also showing more of his male side haha viewing kagome and I loved the part where she's checking him out and he's all smug. goood job! looking fwd to the next one. heeehee it's all so cute
| Reviewed By: InusDemoness [MediaMiner Member] On: September 07, 2006 19:28 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think it was fine, stop worrying yourself. It was a really good chapter; not a bad way to spend your day playing hooky ^_^ And you shouldn't be worried about the citrus at all; you're did a great job with it in "Waiting on a Wish". Maybe you should play hooky more often; you know Monday is Labor day ~grins mischievously~
| Reviewed By: lemon_lover [MediaMiner Member] On: September 07, 2006 13:07 PDT
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really great chapter... point of views are fine so no more worrying : )
| Reviewed By: berlynn On: September 07, 2006 06:31 PDT
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love this story im actually in gemany right now as an exchange student but its definitely not going to stop me from reading cant wait for the next chapter!
| Title: WOOHOOO
Reviewed By: cwillia [MediaMiner Member] On: September 06, 2006 23:40 PDT
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So very glad you updated,finally :) I love this story and don't worry about the citrus, we'll accept whatever you got. Yessss, I'm glad you'll speed things up cause they need to up it up a level. Hey, are you going to get them to get Inu to go to the Winter Festival, I think that'll be a great place for a lime. Eagerly awaiting the next chapter. Happy Writing
| Reviewed By: angelgabe On: September 06, 2006 23:36 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like the story so far. I think the relationship between Inuyasha and Kagome is coming along nicely but the one between Sango and Miroku should pick up the pace a little. Plus Kagome's memories are coming back a little too slow and in snatches that don't really seem relevent or at least lead to more relevent things. For instance doing something that triggers a memory and opens the flood gates for more memories. Even a momentary trickle would be nice. 10 chapters and it looks more like a really good romance between Inuyasha and Kagome with a side of Miroku and Sango instead of a the mystery/romance that it seemed to start out as. I don't really see any of what you've already written as useless or ok to cut out but maybe you could shorter a few things? or make them more condensed? Other that that, I think that the writing style is great and the content is smooth and easy to read. Keep up the good work and I hope you update more quickly next time. I can't wait!
| Title: alatero (nsi)
Reviewed By: alatero [MediaMiner Member] On: September 06, 2006 22:27 PDT
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I'm sooo happy you updated! I love this story so much! And everything flowed beautifully! I hope you update soon, but good luck with school!
| Title: ch 10
Reviewed By: Cynbad146 On: September 06, 2006 22:20 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You made my day with the new chapter. I was so glad to see it. Your skills at describing the effects on their senses and surroundings, during strong emotional scenes, is amazing. I almost feel like I am in the room with them. This is a good step past the usual "really enjoyed the story." It is almost sensory overload. To go along with this point, my favorite line was "sensory chaos." (Correct?) I am also enjoying hearing more of InuYasha's sensory and feelings. Most stories do not explain his thoughts and reactions as well as this story. You suprised me with the direction you took in the 'save her from the hot bath' scene. No outguessing you. Thank you ever so much! Cynbad146
| Reviewed By: cjflutterbye [MediaMiner Member] On: September 06, 2006 21:35 PDT
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Yippee!!! I'm so glad you updated - what fun! Looking forward to next time!
| Title: Thank God!!!!
Reviewed By: Teddy Bear [MediaMiner Member] On: September 06, 2006 20:08 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*Jumps up and down madly and sings a giddy song* Thank you quillwing. You finally updated. I'm so happy. You have no idea how you made my day. Even though school just started down here in Jamaica, I'm getting stressed already, but I'm determined to do my best. Anyways, loved the chapter and the sexual tension (as usual). I could do with a kiss though *hint hint*, but I dont want to rush genius. Take your time, but not too much time. I loved the way you wrote it and yes, everything flowed and the POVs were perfect. Kinda hoping you can make the chapters a little longer though. Im a fast reader so they kinda, you know, end fast. LOL. I dont want to be a burden, but I've forgotten what citrus is. Would you mind writing the meaning of it at the end of your next chapter??? That would help me a lot. It's the only one I'm unsure of. Anyways, thank you for updating and I hope you do it again soon. A little R and R with your stories, once in a while, will be great at this stressful time. That includes Waiting On A Wish. I love that one too. Again, I hope you update soon and never lose your inspiration and your confidence. I hope everything goes well for you in school and that you do great. Hope to write another review soon. Bye.
| Title: inuyashaloverr
Reviewed By: inuyashaloverr [MediaMiner Member] On: September 06, 2006 19:14 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I know its hard being able to update on a regular basis, but I was so excited to see that you were finally able to update...Oh, you have no idea lol. And a most excellent chapter. The POV's were great. To me anyways. Loved all the interaction between the two. Kagome's not as blind as Inu wants her to be, and he isnt very good at hiding things as he used to be, lol. This is great. Just love all the sexual tension and the mischievousness of a small kitsune, lol. Poor Shippo just keeps it up, lol. And when/how/will Miroku ever find out the name of the mysterious female hes so infatuated with? Should be an interesting trip to town for 'pipes', lol. Great chapter to an equally awesome story. I very much look forward to your next update, but you can only do some much in a day, so update when you can. :D
| Reviewed By: ArtemisMoon [MediaMiner Member] On: September 06, 2006 18:14 PDT
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A new chapter! I'm more thrilled than you'll ever know, because today at work I swear I was about to go through fanfiction withdrawal, LOL...I haven't been able to find anything new to ready lately that's actually good. So when I got home and saw that you'd updated, I was so rediculously happy! And boy, did I get what I'd been missing in nearly every other story I've tried to read lately...probably more than I needed! If you load this story with anymore sexual tension, my computer is going to explode. Or I am! But hopefully you won't make me wait much longer for the next chapter, right? I thought your POVs were very good, and I enjoyed getting to see the whole awkward situation from both of their points of view. And the scene at the end with them playing a game together (after his determination NOT to - but you know when they are that determined not to do something, they are always foiled in the end) was too cute! I can't wait for more, especially after your notes at the end of the chapter! So write more as soon as you can, please! Who needs sleep? ^_~
| Title: Ch 10
Reviewed By: lavie [MediaMiner Member] On: September 06, 2006 16:30 PDT
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
i couldn't recall what happened last chap, so i reread the relevant part of ch 9 (a summary would be helpful for future readers should you have the time/inclination). anyway, very well done, I read everything except one paragraph which was a little boring. but it's not often that i pretty much read every word in a fanfiction. also, something u may have left out, is kagome noticing her wet, almost transparent shirt. tonikaku, look forward to the next chap as always, ja ne!
| Reviewed By: Miss_Marilyn69 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 06, 2006 15:27 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's so much easier to review after they changed things here. I glad to see this again, I was wondering what happened after the incident with the mens bath. I liked the way things panned out though. Nicely done. I'm curious to see why Sango came to the area, was she sent by the people that had Kagome shot and dumped. I hope some of the mystery around our favorite characters will start to unravel soon. Until next time
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