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| "Shades of Gray" Reviews/Comments [ 670 ] | | Pages (45): [ « ‹ 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 21 22 › » ] | Reviewed By: crazykiss [MediaMiner Member] On: November 07, 2008 18:54 PST
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WOW...another fantastic chapter, I think I'm loving 'Jiro more and more everytime lol... glad 2 kno the real story behind everything that happened all those centuries ago...keep up the great work!
| Reviewed By: Ryan678 On: November 06, 2008 19:10 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is probably one of the best if not best I have ever read. I glad that you finally updated because the wait was killing me so thanks. This has everything from action to romance almost and lots of drama which is why it holds one attention. Plus the writing and detail is splendid which is key to a good story. So just keeping going and I can't wait to read more thanks.
| Reviewed By: Madjax36 On: November 06, 2008 16:26 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
When you research, you research. I loved this chapter and how you interwove Jiro's real history with his family. Glad he didn't stop to think to throw Lazarus out the window after he beheaded Jiro's baby brother. It was real and vibrant and I just learned the flavor of the termoil and anguish from 16th century Japan and its endless civil war during the Tokagawa era. Like "WOW!" Amazing girl. And I loved Jiro's interaction with Inuyasha to make him realize the frutility of making his situation more complicated regarding their dad. Brilliant! On a personal note, that was my favorite scene/discription when Jiro explains the two paths and his choice/decision to leading his own life. How he was sorry that he couldn't be there, when he wanted to be there. To want to raise his own brother but was driven from his home. Except, if Toga wanted to behead his son, then he'd done it. Even after 3 centuries of a bounty on his head, Toga Taisho - the Inu-no-Taisho himself would have beheaded his own child, if he really meant it. He doesn't, but problem is that he's insane, in a high functioning type of way. And the other random question is then why did he allow Inuyasha to be born if Sesshoumaru was to be the prodigal/only son alive? Hum...the plot thickens. I really, really liked this chapter. Not saying your other chapters aren't fantastic - gods know you're one of the few (like 12 to 20 Authors to Inu Fanfic) that I've read that can capture me and throw me into the middle of your stories with a panoramic view/landscape of your discriptive imagery. IOW, you are a master in projecting a full feature film in my head. It also helps that I could personaly relate to Jiro talking to his little brother about the pitfalls and selfish insanity their dad has. I've spoken to my kid brother regarding our own father in a similar fashion, the self insanity that is. It also helps that we have a 17 year difference in age and we're not the only ones in the family that has this huge gap between ages from all of our siblings. So, I could really relate. And I loved your use of Robert Frost. But I always hum a line from "Stairway to Heaven" by Led Zeppelin "Yes there are two paths you can go by, but in the long run, there's still time to change the road you're on..." Corny ain't it. Love that line, because I find the nature of your story on the one hand to be a meditation on the nature of "Choice" - like there is always a choice and sometimes it ain't about the road you travel on. Sometimes its jumping/leaping across canopy tops. More or less there is always a choice and ones that we don't even realize. However, that open-ended idealism takes away the larger element of the story, which I like just fine. Except this chapter had typos and a missing word here and there. Whatever. I'm just happy that you wrote this chapter and put it out here for us to read. :D Keep at it girl! Keep sending me beautiful film dailies to revel in. Always, Madjax36
| Reviewed By: leilachan ~nsi~ On: November 06, 2008 10:25 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
you're right. a lot of information and it needed so be said. i still can't believe how wrong yash's dad was/is. amazing that someone could do those things, and to their family, no less! evil! and this chap made me love kagejiro even more. (is that possible?) he's awesome. and he certainly knows wtf is going on, even if no one else does. i am proud of kagome for at least trying to make things right with kikyo, but really, everyone is worried about their own hide about now. and kags self reflection she had going on was actually good for her. she needed to realize that the choices she's made were selfish. but, as kagejiro said, maybe it's not too late to change things! ahhh, please write more soon. i know the holiday season makes things hard, but, this is so addictive. : ) oh yeah, LOL at miro's comic relief comment. so true, so true! *hugs him*
| Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: November 06, 2008 03:32 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh! Alucard and Brahm don't sound like very Japanese names are these names they have taken on later on??? or....????
| Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: November 06, 2008 03:30 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yes those would have been the part I liked most (that I could copy and paste...(which is why there are none here tonight but I will say I LOVED Kagejiro story... his heart is in the right place... ) (I had to open up another window with the story so I will paste my favourite lines (that I can find ) "What, tripped and fell on his dick?" ""Fuck Da' "Yash, your dad made a mistake once that I'm sure he doesn't fully regret. Yeah, it might have been tough to face, but from everything you've told me, he was dead in love with your mother. He knows what true love is-" "-and he let it drink herself to death. Dad can pretend he was in love with my mother, but I don't buy it for one fucking moment. If he was in love with her, he would have been there for her, protected her and me. She wouldn't have dug her own grave. Instead he's now letting his wife of five hundred years and seven children do it." "I say fuck it; you're happiness wins out at the end of the day. It's your life, Yasha, and if your father can't recognize that, then he's a shitty father." Miroku glanced around the small apartment. "He wasn't here when I got up a minute ago." Seeing InuYasha's deadpanned look, he remembered that InuYasha was up longer than he was. "If he made it home? I have no idea. He and `Jiro got into a real heated argument at the club after you left; there was a whole lot of yelling and even more swearing. I thought Jakotsu's men were going to call the police. Finally Kagejiro grabbed me and demanded that I drive us home. I was piss drunk so of course I agreed. He then demanded that I stop the car less than half a mile up the road and switched out. I guess demon senses aren't phased by alcohol." "It does too knock you for a fuckin' loop. I'm just used to being drunk; it's a profession for me." "Because love never is!" "That's some heavy shit," With this path, you'll see heartache from not choosing your own life, despair and ultimately, one day you'll look in the mirror and only see dad. He will consume you." Giving it a moment to set in, he continued, "or you can take the other path. The one that will lead you away from Dad, stray from his hand but give you that ability to lead your own life. You can be happy and free and, in time, you'll cross his path again and maybe with age, he will come to accept it. Robert Frost once wrote, `two roads diverged in a wood and I, I took the one less traveled by, and that has made all the difference'. It's your decision now, Yash, just know that where you go will affect your life. It's time to start taking control." "I never laid a hand on that boy, but I may have well swung the sword. Did I kill him, no…did I get him killed; yes." (Note the rest of Kagejiro is pure gold... so I probably over do the characters limit on that one....) "That mother fuckin' son of a bitch!" "You cannot hurt him, InuYasha, it is physically impossible. Many have tried, all have failed. To tear a part of him off, for revenge for your mother and you life, is to simply walk away. If you want to get at him, that's the way to do it." He also wanted to explain why he was never able to be a part of his life. When he had learned about InuYasha's existence, he knew the controversy it would create in the family. He had returned home, for the funeral, with all intent on taking InuYasha back overseas with him. It was bad enough that Sesshoumaru's soul belonged to their father. He was not going to allow that to happen to InuYasha. But he was too late. His father cornered him at the funeral, demanded for `Jiro to leave immediately and never return; he even went as far as to remind Kagejiro of the three hundred year old bounty he had on his head. `Jiro had left without saying goodbye to either of the boys. (AWWW.......)
| Reviewed By: elementalobsession09 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 05, 2008 21:28 PST
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Awesome! I'm soglad to get an update from you. I've been waiting forever! Completely understandable, the moving and all. Just got done doing the same myself. Gosh, waiting for your update was like waiting for Breaking Dawn to come out! Great series by the by. You should check Twilight out. Movie premiers Nov. 21. 3 days before my b-day. Yay! Thanks for updating and I'l be eagerly waitng for more! Good luck!
| Reviewed By: thesims1231 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 05, 2008 20:37 PST
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I MUST KNOW WHERE INUYASHA WENT!!! Great chapter!!! Am I being really forgetful, and stupid, or did we know about Kagome's child before now... I have a feeling that I'm just being an idiot...
| Reviewed By: ninjagurl512 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 05, 2008 20:35 PST
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and this was the highlight of my horrible day. wonderful chapter. definately easier on the heart, except that im sure there is more impending drama. on a final note, i would like to punch kikyo in the esophagus. that is all. keep up the good work dear and im anticipating the next chappie!!
| Reviewed By: MistressKagome4U [MediaMiner Member] On: November 05, 2008 20:16 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Soooo, just finished, and I am sated. FOR NOW... Yes, it has been almost five years. And I loved them. Lol. I have indeed read Twilight, New Moon, and Eclipse, but I don't feel like reading Breaking Dawn because of the stuff I've heard about it.. I'm pretty excited about the movie, though, me and my friends are all planning to go in a big group. Lol. I'll keep this short, maybe I'll message you on myspace. Lol. See ya!
| Reviewed By: malitiadixie [MediaMiner Member] On: November 05, 2008 20:06 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Where in the world to start?...Well, I kind of hoped that Kagome would blow up at Kikyo already. I know Kagome thinks that the way Kikyo acts is all her mother's fault, but really, who in the world says some of the things that comes out of that girl's mouth? I know she's hurting, but she can really be a bitch sometimes. Kagome should have cleaned her clock for the whore remark and espically for the rape remark. It really was rape and I don't care who says any different. As for Rin, I really wish she would talk to someone. I'm really worried for her. Sesshoumaru is a really big ass hat and I want to rip all his pretty hair out. I hope he feels like shit for what he's done. I doubt that, but a girl can dream, can't she. I have come to like Miroku's character the most, I think. He's so funny but also a voice of reason for Inuyasha most of the time. I'm so glad we finally got the story behind the death of Inuyasha's half-brother. Poor 'Jiro. He's not really responisable, but I would feel the same way. How could you not? I hope Inuyasha tells his father off. Then, I hope he finds Kagome and sweeps her off to somewhere far, far away. Maybe they can grab Souta and go off to live with 'Jiro. That would be nice. Thank you so much for the new chapter. I'm so excited to think that we may get another one before the end of the month. This is one of my all time favorite fics. Thank you for sharing it with us. P.S. If I misspelled anything, I'm sorry. I got a little excited...>^.^
| Title: Chapter 32
Reviewed By: Drake Clawfang [MediaMiner Member] On: November 05, 2008 19:27 PST
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Excellent chapter, and good revelations on Inuyasha's part. Kikyo pissed me off, but then, she does that. :p
| Reviewed By: MistressKagome4U [MediaMiner Member] On: November 05, 2008 18:56 PST
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Oooooh yes. I haven't read it but I wanted to be the first comment!!! I'm so ex-hight-ed!!!
| Reviewed By: Sovereignty [MediaMiner Member] On: November 04, 2008 21:36 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I heart Kagejiro!!!!!!!
| Reviewed By: silveraliora [MediaMiner Member] On: September 27, 2008 05:45 PDT
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So i finally got around to reading this chapter and i have to say...why did i wait this long?! I loved it! I'm glad that Kikyo finally knows about Inu and Kag. And hopefully we can find out soon who Kikyo is deeing on the side. Can't wait for the next chapter!
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