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Title: Congratulations!
Reviewed By: tootalltygerlily [MediaMiner Member] On: April 03, 2006 23:29 PDT
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Congratulations, your story has been nominated for "Best Angst Fiction" at the Feudal Association. Voting will be held through May 1st, 2006 and winners will be notified shortly thereafter. Feel free to join our group and/or help us spread the word about our group! The official website for the group - http://feudalassociation.cadkitten.com/ The yahoo group where nomination/voting takes place - http://groups.yahoo.com/group/FeudalAssociation/ If you have any questions, feel free to email Dark Avenger (the owner) at inuyashasbytch@gmail.com
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Reviewed By: C&C Bandit (NSI) On: April 03, 2006 15:20 PDT
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Oh, can of worms! Can of WORMS! I have been following this fic since its conception and I have been most impressed with your plotting abilities. You take realistic situations and deal with them accordingly and also have a knack for looking at several different facets of the issues that you raise. That being said, I am sorry to say that these past few chapters have not been up to your usual standards. I was willing to keep quiet and look past the hospital 'detaining' Kagome from her family because the fic takes place in Japan and I do not know their law structures. Here in the US, there is no legal grounds wherein a hospital has the authority to keep Kagome against her will or to keep Inuyasha from seeing his wife. She said nothing happened and while the physicians might strongly suspect otherwise, she is a grown woman and has the right to walk out of the facility at any time should she so desire. There are of course exceptions, but in a case like this, the hospital could not legally keep them apart. But the fic doesn't take place in the US, so I really can't comment on the accuracy of that issue. ;) What troubles me enough to write to you is the way that this last chapter went. Inuyasha is traveling back to the past to look for the jewel shards with Kikyou, while Kagome stays in the present? There are a NUMBER of problems with this scenario that you really haven't touched on. First, good reason or not, he is abandoning his pregnant wife to go traveling with another woman who just happens to be his first love. I cannot imagine that a hormonal and pregnant Kagome would be so understanding about this. But even if she is, her family certainly would not be. You have set up in this fic that Inuyasha has been given a 'second chance' not to hurt Kagome through memory loss, and it seems to me that he is now squandering it. Second, he is now married to Kagome and his first responsibility should be to HER, not to finding the shards. But instead of taking care of his mate, he is leaving her and giving her back to her family to care for. Plus, he is putting his own life in danger and he knows it. He is risking leaving his new wife and family widowed and fatherless so that he can find a shard? I doubt that this is the kind of 'love and devotion' Mama Higurashi imagined Inuyasha was going to be giving when she gave her daughter to him… Again, I understand that Kagome's heart might be big enough to not voice any of these concerns, but I think Mama or possibly even Jii-chan and Souta would. After all, when Kagome starts getting REAL mood swings, aches and pains, and feels the baby kick, she is going to want the love and support of her husband. He may not be able to take the pain away, but he'd at least be there with her… She's going to want to share the experiences with him and he'll be off with Kikyou. Anyway, that's my piece, and I hope that I've helped. You truly are one of the good authors out there, and I look forward to your future chapters.
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Title: They've come so far
Reviewed By: bluezinthos [MediaMiner Member] On: April 03, 2006 11:39 PDT
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Going back and looking at the beginning of this fic and now with only a few chapters left and the end in sight, it amazes me how far everyone has come. Inu and Kags have over come so much and then have to deal with a villager that ruins the past and nearly takes away their future. Will the neko psychiatrist make another appearence to tell them about the youkai hospital and how she got them out of that mess? i was actually glad to see a bit of the old jealousy between Kagome and Kikyou show up in the form of her hormones. There was so much insecurity there, that even with the blessing of a new beginning some of that pain leaking out isn't unrealistic. With Inu traveling with Kikyou for the last shard I can't help but think of Kikyou and Kagome's talk and Kikyou finally 'resting' after the jewel is whole. Will Kagome come back to help Inu let her go or will that be something he has to do on his own and then seek the comfort of his mate in the modern era? Beautiful work, each chapter just keeps getting better. I look forward to the conclusion of this piece and then, of course, Unfettered. Until you update again...your faithful minion
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Title: whew...
Reviewed By: inu hanyou nikkie On: April 03, 2006 11:29 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Blue in the face, she lets out the breathe she was holding since the last chapter.... and breathes a quick sigh of relief!! The Literary Goddess is back again. I'm so happy the problem of keeping them apart has been solved! and done is such a pleasing WAFFY way! Thank you! I liked how it was a youkai who helped them. And POOR Inuyasha and Kagome. They have just begun to experience the pregnancy hormones. I think they might get worse? Wonder if someone will inform Inuyasha that at birthing time a woman will say sometimes the most insane and nasty things without really meaning to. It was a great chapter. I liked how Inuyasha put his foot down and made Kagome stay where she will be safe. Even if it does mean traveling with Kikyo. Thank goodness she took the spell off!! Inuyasha might not survive pregancy. I love the emotional charges in this chapter as much as all previous chapters. I really must commend and Kudos you on the brillance in which you masterfully create your stories!! (Can you tell I am a huge fan of yours? ) Each story you write is a masterpiece one does not outdo another. Each are prefection!! This is totally awesome work you are doing and I will say I will be sad to see this end so soon even though I already knew it was. Thank you again for this story and even bigger Thank You for sharing it with us!! It's an honour to read. Please Keep up the most excellent work and you totally ROCK!!
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Reviewed By: inu hanyou nikkie On: March 31, 2006 17:56 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I didn't get to see this chapter went I read and review the other chapter before it. And wow... Literary Goddess... oh my sweet kami above!ohlordohlordohlordohlord. This chapter is even more emotional powerful then I had thought could be possible!! What is going to happen now!!?? Will they lose the twins to the "good" intentioned busybodies who feel that Inuyasha and Kagome have an unfit envirnoment in which to raise childern? They seem to always get the truly innocent ones and let the real criminals run free. And that awful village!! After what they did to rid them of the youkai!! I just wanted to kick their butts. I hope Inuyasha goes back and scares the living beegeeus outta them!! I can't believe they struck her!! I hope that Inuyasha and mama gets Kagome out of that hospital!! Will they interfer with the mate bonds? Will there be a unwanted and uninvited social worker assigned to Kagome. Someone who would be an extremist to the cause? How is sweet heavens will they get themselves out of this misunderstanding. Is Inuyasha going to be able to fight this battle? WHat a cliffie!! What a writer!! What a story!! What angst!! What joy to read!! I can't wait for the next chapter!! Your are one of the bestest writer!! Please keep up the most fabulous and powerfully charged and sweet writing!! Thank you! Thank you and thank you again for sharing this story with us!! You totally rock!!
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Reviewed By: inu hanyou nikkie On: March 30, 2006 19:48 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, another chapter has come out for the Literary Goddess!! Welcome back again!! A pleasure to see the update!! And it was great, beyond words! Really, superb!! I loved it... and so touching! I loved the play of emotions that went on in this chapter!! Kagome's heart and trust for/with Inuyasha knows no boundaries.When he transformed I held my breath as I read then cheered Kagome for proving her point and removing the Osuwari command from the rosary. But I have a question- when he turned full youkai and saw Kagome... Why didn't he smell his scent on her? Or does his sense of smell get warped because of the transformation? He could tell she was a youkai mate and pregnant but not that she was his? Sorry I was just a little confused. I was inwardly hoping for a bit of youkai Inuyasha/Kagome loving but that might have been a little too much. So I was happy it wasn't written. Kind of hard to write I find. I can't wait to see the ending of this story. Poor Inuyasha - I am glad the sit command is gone because when her hormones go from one extreme to another in under a nanosecond he'll be thankfully. What is he going to do about pregnancy and strange cravings? And wondering if after this one is completed if you will be able to update on Unfettered? Will they met up with Kikyo again? So many questions and so many answer to find out! So I wish to say thank you for sharing this wonderful story with us!! THANK YOU!! and you totally rock!! Please keep up the most wonderful, extremely excellent and touching work!! Can't wait for the next installment!!
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Title: Great Updates!
Reviewed By: InuGrrrl (NSI) On: March 30, 2006 01:29 PST
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I liked the new chapters much. I laughed so hard at this part: "she cried out in pleasure and begged, actually begged the foul creature not to stop his assault on her." Just HILARIOUS. I could just see that fat villager with his mouth hanging open. HAHA. Twins! Kawaii & i loved the part with Yasha & Mrs. H. Very nice.
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Title: inuyashaloverr
Reviewed By: inuyashaloverr [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2006 14:33 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, that was quick. Great chapter. Villager shoulda got his ass kicked. And doncha just love how doctors love to assume everything? Still, great chapter. Update when you can.
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Reviewed By: Stephmtoe [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2006 11:30 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That is a big change in events! I like this one last little set back before you finish the story. Very nice, cant wait till you update again.
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Reviewed By: Stephmtoe [MediaMiner Member] On: March 27, 2006 19:46 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Cute Chapter, you made Kagome get Pregnet a little sooner then I had expected. BUt still very good story. Looking forward for more updates. Hope that they come soon!
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Reviewed By: inuyashaloverr [MediaMiner Member] On: March 27, 2006 10:09 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great chapter! Sorry I don't review all the time, Im ashamed, but I do read when you've updated. Hope the next one is soon.
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Reviewed By: Bree-AFF On: March 12, 2006 08:25 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I normally read and review this fic on AFF but the site still won't let me review. First, it's good to see this story updated again, I have missed reading it. Though sad to see it coming to an end, I'm glad you already have Unfettered in progress. I really liked how you handled the honeymoon by giving us enough information without going into a day by day description. I know I've read that first poem you used at some time in my life. I'm going to see if I can find it again. It was nice how Inuyasha and Kagome were able to look at the night sky and see that it was the same sky they looked at in the feudal era. With Inuyasha still being somewhat uncomfortable in Kagome's time, it's nice he has an anchor to the past. Keep up the good work, and I look forward to your updates.
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Reviewed By: mm-reviewer [MediaMiner Member] On: March 11, 2006 19:33 PST
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I think you forgot that in Chapter 24 you already had them change clothes and have sex in Kagome's room at the shrine, right after the wedding ceremony. In chapter 25 you made them change clothes again and kept referring to the lemon as the first time having sex as man and wife. I don't know if you want to fix the error or not, but most people will probably notice it. Otherwise, it's a good story.
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Reviewed By: Stephmtoe [MediaMiner Member] On: March 11, 2006 19:31 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was so good. I love the poems you put in there. I was getting worried that you had stopped writing the story when you werent posting on your usual times. BUt I am glad that youa are doing it again. Hope that you post on your other story soon too. Cant wait to see how that one turns out.
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Reviewed By: inu hanyou nikkie On: March 11, 2006 18:39 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, Literary Goddess, another absolutely breath taking chapter. (By the way AFF won't let readers to review. They have a problem. Just tried. got a nice Error message.) I loved this Honeymoon chapter.It was soo touching. And the lemon was hot!! Romantic seductive and delicious!! I am truly in awe of your talents with the written words and for creating such vibrate and beautiful imagary!! Kudos!!! Your story maintains its flow and continuity throughtout from beginning to soon be seen ending!! I can't wait for the next chapter to come out and while I am saddened that the story is coming to a close, I am truly thankful that you have posted your story for us to read. Thank you. I enjoy how you have keep the character so in character yet have them matured. It was nice for Sesshoumaru to lend his home and hotel to Inuyasha and Kagome. I wonder what will happen when they go back to Sengoku-jidai-Will Miroku keep his word not to tease Inuyasha? Can't wait!! Please keep up the most excellent work!!! And it's great to see you posting again... I had been missing seeing your updates.. and eagerly awaited your return... Welcome back!!!
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