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Reviewed By: Kikyou_104 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 21, 2004 04:49 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i liked this story soooo much it took me two nights to read it all, all 21 chapters well loved the stor and your other ones keep up the awsome writing.....Ja ne....Ruthy
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Reviewed By: silver_demon_angel On: February 12, 2004 00:35 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i loved your fic! it was awsome! you did an awsome job! i think you should make a sequel cause i'm very eager to know what happens next!and i'm sure alot of other people are too! i will be looking for your sequel or a update
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Reviewed By: Tsuki Karasu On: February 02, 2004 17:00 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW!!! I totally loved this fic!!! It was incredible!!! Awsome Job!! This was really original and i've never read anything like it before!!! You're an amazing author!!! Congrad's!!! Ja Mata
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Reviewed By: Hino Mitsukiko [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2004 18:37 EST
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It's actually Montarou..
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Reviewed By: Hino Mitsukiko [MediaMiner Member] On: January 27, 2004 16:48 EST
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OMFG! My ofukuro [mom] is the same way! She picks unripe fruit from the stores [bananas/peaches/etc] and always makes us wait for them to get ripe. Then when the fruit's been laying around for almost a week, she yells at us for not eating it... she's weird... Jaa na whitewavereborn-san! ~*~ Mitsuki
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Reviewed By: 12blue12 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 22, 2004 22:51 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
loved it love it LOVED IT! god to tell u the truth when i first red the summery i didn't wan to read it so i left the story alone but when i saw how many visiters u were getting i became a little curious so i read your fanfic and god u right great im sorry i didn't read it earlier! hopin for more fics great as this one love yeah cya bye!
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Title: Courtship
Reviewed By: Chibi-Kerochan 2 On: January 12, 2004 21:26 EST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
HEY! THIS STORY IS AWESOME! I'm so glad that Inuyasha started courting Kagome how kawaii and they got married! I loved how you described the wedding! sighs... that's how i want mine some day! but wow this was awesome im so glad that you forgot about Montaro.. Montar i so hated his guts! inuyasha totally kicked Kouga's but! the battle that you had with kouga and Inuyasha was AMAZING i couldn't stop reading! ^O^ Sincerely, Chibi-Kerochan
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Reviewed By: Relix On: December 28, 2003 18:31 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
WHOOO!!!! I just finished reading this.. this was pretty fucking awesome!!
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Title: Hey how is the next one coming?
Reviewed By: Vellakitty [MediaMiner Member] On: December 26, 2003 23:35 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey your "Courtship" story was GREAT!!!! I can't, but will have to, wait until you come out with the sequal to this! GOD you write great stuff!! MAN!!!!! I just, but still have to, wait! Good luck and my best wishes, and happy holidays!
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Reviewed By: markyc58 On: December 23, 2003 14:22 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am enjoying your story very much. I love the way you are writing the characters....you have 'fleshed' them out and they certainly seem much more than 'two-dimensional' characters. I also love the way you have interwoven everyday things into the story (unripe fruit...I do it, too and yes, I'm female! Men just don't have a clue, do they?) You do, however, need to work a little on your words that sound the same but mean different things, and getting some of your words in the correct tense (past, present and future tense). Other than that, it's just great! Please keep going! mcrews@ssd.k12.mo.us
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Reviewed By: Dragon's Lover [MediaMiner Member] On: December 13, 2003 13:01 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Call me addicted. At times, I'll admit, I got bored with detail and just changed what I was reading, but I finished it! It took a while since I was constantly coming and going, but I finished it! So. . . When are you going to finish this? I'll be watching! You're already on my favorites.
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Reviewed By: Kikyo101 On: December 13, 2003 03:39 EST
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I absolutely loved this fic. And you know what? I still do. I have a question that I bet a lot of people probably want to know.If you already answered this question somewhere, it's my mistake. I was wondering..... did you come up with a title for the sequel? Because if you did, I'd like to know it, so that I will be able to find it. My E-mail Address is Dupeshaki@aol.com . Please let me know. I can't wait to read it. Thanks in advance.
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Reviewed By: Lyth [MediaMiner Member] On: December 10, 2003 18:20 EST
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Wow, I am in awe. I haven't read a good fic in awhile, but when I found this, I just kept coming back for more. Don't stop writing, I can't wait to see what else you come up with. Beautifully done.^^ ~Lyth
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Title: Great story but your spelling needs a bit of work..
Reviewed By: Little John of Locksland On: December 05, 2003 13:49 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
As the review/comment title suggests, I felt this was a great story but the mis-spelled words cost some points not only in the S&G category but also in the enjoyment and overall rating. A lot of authors make the mistake of spelling a word out by its sound (even then I sometimes wonder if they even know the correct sound of the words...) and then if they even bother to spellcheck it quite often gets overlooked since what they spelled out is a word but just not the right word. This is the case for instance when you had Kaede marrying Kagome & Inuyasha where you mistook "surface" (like a kitchen counter surface top) for "service" (such as a brake service job). However, you made an even worst mistake, that even a spellchecker would have caught, when you used "intrusting" when Kagome confessed to Sango about Inuyasha's courtship. That "intrusting" you used does not even exist in the English language, so a spellchecker would have easily spotted it. What you meant to use was "interesting" (as in something being of interest). There were minor other mistakes but those were the biggest two that jarred me from a reader's bliss in the beautiful flow of words. Hence the rating of 7 in S&G. Your style was pretty good, however I didn't like the way you suddenly inserted a narrator to explain the fate of Montaro as it did what is commonly known as "breaking the fourth wall" meaning that instead of the characters telling their own story and making it seem real, that the story suddenly has stuff explained out instead. You could have easily avoided this by having one of the wedding guests such as Sesshoumarou explain that the reason they arrived so late was that they had to go around a pack of wolves feasting on a dead human. That guest would add a mention of some item the victim had been wearing which would have been identified by his brother or father who also were at the wedding. In this way the result is the same namely Montaro is out of their lives after becoming a feast for wolves, but the story tells itself instead of having to superimpose an all-knowing explanation. Now since you only made that mistake once to my knowledge I only deducted one point in style. The mark I've given your creativity and originality speaks for itself so I'll skip on to enjoyment. I really enjoyed the story but your spelling problems and that one superimposed explanation did hurt it. Fix those mistakes and I'd have given it a 10 instead of the 8 currently enterred. I waverred on the overall whether to mark it as an 8 or a 9 but in the end gave you the benefit of the doubt since overall it was a very good tale minus the errors, plus you did not make some of the more common mistakes (such as confusing the 'heat' and menstrual cycle timings). All in all, this was a great fanfic but it needs the three previously listed slips corrected, before I'd call it perfect. I do, however, look forward to its sequel. Speaking of which... is there something going on between Sessho and Taka... or are my relationship sensors off-target on that...? Oh, and speaking of Taka... it's a shame that when you had her eat a human who didn't taste very good that it wasn't Montaro... I thought it would have been a perfect ending to the man... although I later realized why you were keeping him around. Still... it would have made for an in-plot ending to the man instead of the dubious way he met his end as is.
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Reviewed By: Admiral Biatch [MediaMiner Member] On: December 02, 2003 22:25 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, I quite enjoyed this. Your diction needs a little bit of work, but not too shabby. I don't recall stumbling over too many spelling errors neither. Overall, a good fic to read. Bonus to me for finding it when it was complete. No waiting for updates!
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