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 Title: Woo hoo!!!
Reviewed By: doggieearlover [MediaMiner Member]  On: November 23, 2006 17:17 PST
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
(I've had to split this because it wouldn't all fit in one). Review, Part 1: I have to say, it doesn't look like Kouga will have a pleasant welcome when he comes back. Poledra doesn't think much of him because of his behavior, and just as scary is Sesshomaru. Not only for Rin, but for going after Kagome. If I were Kouga, I'd stay away for a while, I think. And poor Rin, she certainly has had a trying day. She deserves some peace and quiet. And I see InuYasha is picking up on the telepathy between Sesshomaru and Rin. Of course he's hearing a voice of his own in his head, and he is observant in spite of his sometimes rash behavior, so he would notice that something is going on between them. And what is going on with Sesshoumaru? Why will he not look at InuYasha? Do the markings on his face upset him that much? Does InuYasha remind him too much of their father? Is it some reminder of something that was unsettled between the two when their father died? He surely won't be forced to look at his face for longer than a moment, it appears. I can't wait to find out more about what is going on there, as well as the conversation he was having with Rin before then. And Myouga, the coward as always. It figures almost the first words out of his mouth would be to ask if InuYasha will hurt him. Silly flea. Though he does have useful information, when he finally spits it out. So InuYasha is finally gaining control, thanks to Kagome's total acceptance of him, and the demon's acceptance of her. And I'm surprised Myouga was brave enough to bring up that, much less the possibility of future pups. At least he did finally say it wasn't proper to intrude on a mated pair - I was beginning to worry (just what we need - another pervert). And then, a little peace and quiet for all as they have their meal. I'm glad Miroku settled things with Sango, because that could have gotten ugly pretty quickly. And Shippou, well he's just going to have to start to grow up a little. He can't be the center of attention all the time. And who's he mad at this time? Miroku for making him stay with Sango or Kagome for acting concerned about InuYasha instead of running to him. Or, is he scared of Sesshomaru, or is it InuYasha because he still has those markings on his face?
 Title: Woo hoo! (part 2)
Reviewed By: doggieearlover [MediaMiner Member]  On: November 23, 2006 17:15 PST
Rating(s):
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
(My review wouldn't fit all in one, so I've split it in half. I'm posting the second half first since they show up in reverse order with the newest at the top.)Review, Part 2 Back to Rin, InuYasha certainly has put a lot of thought into her present, and he even asked someone else for some help with it. He certainly is maturing as the story progresses. I'm not surprised at all that he loves to run. His speed and agility are really amazing, and it would be a good way to clear his head of everything that had happened. He also finally got a look at himself with his markings. He probably never really had a chance to study them before, and see what he looked like with them - and now he has some idea of what his father looked like. That was a nice tidbit of information from Myouga. But then he remembers the events of the day again, and the stupid wolf. Oh, the voice is back! It still doesn't want InuYasha to kill Kouga even though he really had every right to. All I can say is Kouga was really lucky that he still has his hide. The voice sure is frustrating InuYasha, riling him up, and then disappearing again, sending him on the prowl again. I almost felt sorry for the poor bear. It didn't really have a chance once InuYasha had set his sights on it. At least he saved it a slow death from starvation, and it looks like Rin will get her blanket. Finally, some alone time with his mate. Whoa, his demon wasn't far beneath the surface, was he? He certainly didn't like the smell of Kouga on Kagome's dress, though I can't blame Inuyasha one bit. And the lemon, it was hot as always. I expected something more raw and heated after everything that had happened, and you certainly delivered it. InuYasha has reclaimed Kagome in the most primal way and his markings have now retreated, so I guess everything is back in balance. He must have been a good boy since Kagome decided to give him his present. Silly InuYasha, first remembering his pain of being pinned to the tree before he remembered if it weren't for the tree, he'd never met Kagome. He in return gives her a present, that didn't have a use (which made me laugh); he might turn into a romantic yet! Yes, it's perfectly okay to give a gift that doesn't do anything, but just is what it is. What can I say, I really enjoyed this chapter, and look forward to the next. I want to know what was going through that thick skull of Sesshomaru's!
 Title: YEEAH, BOI!
Reviewed By: FullmetalFangirl [MediaMiner Member]  On: November 23, 2006 13:23 PST
Comment/Review:
Great chappie!!! (especially the end. *nosebleed* lol) I am glad you are writing again :D
 Reviewed By: Jester08 [MediaMiner Member]  On: November 22, 2006 09:39 PST
Rating(s):
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Great chapter. I'm so glad you updated!!! Sesshomaru and Inuyasha really need to make up because it's so sad when they fight!! I can't wait for more, so update soon please!
 Reviewed By: New Fan  On: November 22, 2006 07:52 PST
Comment/Review:
Wow. You updated. Miss your stuff. Update soon.
 Reviewed By: Inu Hanyou Nikkie NSI  On: November 21, 2006 04:43 PST
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Okay, we are now onto the next batch of chapter reviews!! Yay!! Hooray! Whoot!! Whoot! This is certainly oh-so-very Awesome Literary Goddess! I am loving this story! Brilliant! Sheer Brilliance!! Chapter 26 is first one up! Oh was a great choice to have them all head to the banquet together, Very nice! Ouch! Mega ouch! The Inu ears must be ringing from having the trumpets blaring at them from both sides!! That will probably put them into a foul mood. Is Sesshoumaru the only one who is concerned for Inuyasha's welfare and state of mind? I Really love the description of Rin's new Kimono. It sounds so pretty on her. Sesshoumaru had set it aside for her?! He had gone and gotten Rin another Kimono for special occasions?! That is.. is just so.. so melt-me-into-a-puddle-of-happy-goo too cute for words!! So Very Sweet of him! Errr.. question? Where did he have this kimono stored/set aside? Was it secreted inside his own clothing? Is kind of weird and freaky.. Poor Rin must be so very frightened! And she would have been even more frightened had he left her alone in their room. Nuts! We missed the on the boys reactions on seeing the girls in their dresses. Darn it. The choker is certainly beautiful. Loved Kagome's description. And again I wonder why Kagome needs to cover Inuyasha's mark? Isn't she proud of his mark? I didn't think that they would be so materialistic when it came to ideas of beauty.. Kagome's mark, Sango's scar.. Will Inuyasha take Kagome's hiding of his mark the wrong way? Will they have a bad fight over it? Will Inuyasha be even more possessively protective of Kagome? Ahhh! Nice they have spelled Inuyasha's so adorable ears. Are they invisible or looking more like humans? Oh dear titles, this I can see as getting messy and set some tempers flaring.. won't mention any names. *cough* Kagome *cough* Inuyasha *cough cough* Sesshoumaru at least is pretty much used to the pomp and circumstances. Will he coach his little brother later on when they have more of a downtime? Ha! Looks like the Inu brothers can catch glimpses of Beldin under the entertainer's guise! Can you tell I am really loving this story!! Woot! Bravo! Love it!! How it so wraps itself around the readers senses and pulls them into the story so they are a part of it! Beautiful writing!! Exquisite!! Now That's an odd pair to enter a room together! Barak and Mandorallen!.. giggles.. The Shiny and The Hairy! Lol!! Loved how you have kept them all in character, and Barak's under the breath complaint of 'I hate titles'. I loved that Silk and Hettar went in together, followed by Miroku and Sango. At least he has kept his hands to himself so far. Sango is in a very bad night. Sighs, poor girl. And now for Sesshoumaru and Rin. I think I am going to hurt myself laughing! Sesshoumaru is a Center of Attention baby! LOL!! Whoot! Oh that is just grand!! He is in his element. I have this weird image of a dog that is prancing and acting up for the audience! Sesshoumaru! Sesshoumaru was Straining to keep his Satisfaction under control!?! Okay.. must take a break now to laugh.. nope.. still laughing.. okay.. okay.. I think I have it under control. That was priceless!! Oh I loved it!! I could imagine Sesshoumaru purring with pleasure. Kudos! Bravo! Bravo! And here again you keep the characters so very true to their creators! Zakath only showing his status by the crown. Awesome! Sesshoumaru and Zakath sharing equal status.. that would make Inuyasha only slightly lower than him. How is Inuyasha going to handle this? Not very well. Poor Inuyasha, I think his fight or flight response has turned the dial to flight. Why did he want to bolt to the table? Oh my. Inuyasha glared at the protocol man while gripping Tessaiga! Why was Kagome digging her nails into Inuyasha? It is certainly going to be caught by the horrid little women of court. They see it a Kagome forcing Inuyasha to remain at her side, that he doesn't want to be near her.The piranha's of court will take advantage of it!
 Reviewed By: Inu Hanyou Nikkie NSI  On: November 19, 2006 12:22 PST
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
And here we go, onto to Part Five of the Review! And still on Chapter 25! Polgara is going to dress Kagome first. Lovely! Though I do wonder why she picked Kagome first. Laughed at Polgara telling Kagome to strip, wasn't it a certain half demon who when they first got to know each other told her to strip? It seems to be a routine she has. Another beautiful dress. Kagome is going to look like a Celtic Princess!! Though hasn't Kagome gone through the similar thing in her time? Getting dresses and fitted for uniforms... there would be seamstresses as well... Oh dear she asked Sango to undress. Sango is even more uptight than Inuyasha is! Sango's dress sounds nice and royal like as well! I agree... Miroku is going to be horrid. He will make her so upset by so disrespecting her. I don't believe that female. Gah, she is awful. Poor Kagome. I think she is bugging her so she can get her imagination filled of Inuyasha. Yes! Polgara has told her to stop it. Heh.. I know why she wanted green... She probably wanted Inuyasha to look at her and compare the two of them. Sorry... I really don't like her. Five reviews! Yay!! And I'm still loving the story and can't wait to read more!! Why was Kagome ashamed of Inuyasha's mark? Why isn't she proud of it or Inuyasha's claim on her of his promise to her? LOL! I was right! Inuyasha is very relaxed after having the two major things in his priority list! Eat and Kagome. LOL!! Ummm... a thought.. is Inuyasha naked or.. Shoes! She has to get shoes on Inuyasha! Oh this ought to be rich!! Poor Inuyasha shoes must be horrible torture devices for him. How is Kagome going to manage this. Cheating. Using the command to slam him down and plopping herself down on top of him. Okay she got the shoes on but for how long will they last.. not even 10 seconds... giggles..! Oh this fight is going to be good! It has now degenerated into a childish kid fight. Nice! I love it! I loved Inuyasha growling at Kagome that she was going to pay for it. Okay! So he is Naked! Giggles!! That just makes it even more hilarious!! Kagome swore!! It must really be a spectacular fight! That is too much!! People have barged in on them! Good girl Kagome keeping Inuyasha covered. That was dumb! Now Inuyasha is going to feel awful about his body. Smooth Kagome real smooth. Huh? I missed something, I think! Inuyasha is being seductive? And Kagome blowing him off... all because she is embarrassed. Yep. That is so true to her character, she gets embarrassed Inuyasha is the one to suffer. The ending was a little confusing to me. Yep... she blew him off. This is really a truly Amazing and Gifted story I am reading! I love every part of it. It is so thrilling the way you ahve blended everything together. Please keep up the Masterful and Awesome work!! Totally Rock! You Totally Rock!! Can't wait to review the next section of chapters!
 Reviewed By: Inu Hanyou Nikkie NSI  On: November 19, 2006 11:19 PST
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
And now we have part four of the reviews coming up!! And only in Chapter 25!! Yipee!! I am so excited right now!! Loving this story so much!! Literary Goddess you have written one heck of a delicious and epic story!! Chapter 25 continued: Oh dear Inuyasha has seven hours to go before the horror of the Banquet! Oh that is much too rich!! Guys talking about fashion!! And not gay or gayish (waves apologetically to all guys who are gay)... Oh I love it!! LOL!! They are discussing fashions!! I think I'm going to be stuck on this for quite a while!!.. .. Nope, I can't stop laughing!! They are discussing Fashions!! I hope Inuyasha will get some coaching... Oh the perfect one to help his is Polgara!! Yes!! I would love to see even a one shot of Polgara teaching Etiquette Lessons to Inuyasha!! Garion spoke the truth there. Ce'Nedra does fly off the handle when she doesn't get what she wants. And Kagome has the sit command. Oh! Don't let Barak hear him say that about beards. I really am feeling badly for Sango and Inuyasha. I hope things will go okay for them. Inuyasha has seven hours in which to stew about the banquet. Poor Inuyasha. He is so completely out of his element here! Huh? Miroku protesting at sharing a room with Sango... oh yes... he wouldn't be able to have women in his room if Sango is there. (I don't honestly have a high view of him.) I don't think he can keep himself to one woman, no matter how much he may love Sango. Loved the description of Inuyasha's and Kagome's room. Luxury. And you kept Inuyasha true to his character. Thinking the room was way overdone. I am sooo loving this story very much!! Whoot!! Whoot! Kagome must Really be wanting a hot bath! To be shred her clothes like that! And confusing poor Inuyasha in the process. She must be really excited about the bath, she hasn't turned on Inuyasha for looking at her naked. I loved that Inuyasha's parts were agreeing with his thoughts. Did I just read that right?! Kagome inviting him into the bath!! Along with her!?! Wow!! This is great!! Inuyasha is oh so very tough and unbeatable but when it comes to hot water and curry. He is defeated easily. Is Kagome tormenting Inuyasha on purpose? Oh dear, Inuyasha feels on trial here. Why is Kagome behaving this way to him? Ever since Ce'Nedra got her hands on Kagome alone, it seems she has changed Kagome and I don't know if I like it. And Inuyasha knows she has changed as well. This is definitely strange. Erotic but pretty strange so not like Kagome. Oh Inuyasha is definitely enjoying his beloved mate. Squeals happily! Kagome is seducing her mate in the tub. Cute! And Inuyasha's true to character reaction to sputter. Awesome! I thrill at how you have kept the characters all true to the way they have been created. (exception of this strangeness which I still can't decide upon.) Oh my this is some hot love scene! I adore the way you have written out this scene. So romantic and erotic!! I think I will like hot baths from now on even more!! Drools! Inuyasha a very highly complicated simple man. LOL!! Errgh! Okay. I didn't like the fact that Ce'Nedra told Kagome to trick Inuyasha into the tub just because she didn't approve of his looks. LOVE it!!! How you get the reader to become so involved and woven into the story that they will react and feel to the situations and emotions. And right now, Ce'Nedra is providing very poor influence on Kagome's relationship with Inuyasha or on Kagome's growth herself. If she gets any more clutches into their relationship she is going to make it worsen or make it break. Bangs head. Dumb Kagome real dumb, she used sex to trick Inuyasha. Now the Love scene is no longer a love scene for me. Sighs...I can't wait to read more! I liked that Polgara scolded Ce'Nedra but wish she was firmer with the twit. Again Not my favourite character but that makes the story better! Alright Dresses! I can hardly wait to see what wonderous beauty you have for us! I love the choice for Polgara! Beautiful! Bravo!
 Reviewed By: New Fan  On: November 14, 2006 12:31 PST
Comment/Review:
You finally updated. I thought we lost you there (no longer interesting in writing Inuyasha stories). You made may week. Update really soon.
 Reviewed By: Inu Hanyou Nikkie NSI  On: November 11, 2006 15:40 PST
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
And now we are on the third part of the review!! I have a feeling you are going to be in for a doozy!! Yay!! Well I do need to make up for all the time I lagged behind in with getting my reviews posted up for you! And little way of saying sorry! Still on Chapter 24! I did notice sometimes my Pen/Art name does come up as a link sometimes and sometimes not. Chapter 24 : Rin is going to love the flowers and will want to get some for Sesshoumaru. Giggles... I think Kagome might be indulging in a few fantasies of her and Inuyasha in the gardens and flowers and kissing. Chuckles! And again perfectly in character... Kagome enjoying and getting into the mood while Inuyasha is scowling and not getting the concept behind the "mood"... Inuyasha is going to get fed!! He must be thrilled! Again I really love the descriptions that you use!! Thank you so much Literary Goddess for providing us with this beautiful chance to read this story! Truly exquisite and masterfully presented and executed!! Thank you so much!! Squeals happily!! Sighs... Inuyasha is not "rude" per se... he is under skilled. Why can't she seem to remember he didn't grow up learning social skills and Years and years of habit is very hard to break in a short period of time?! I think that is one of my Pet peeves towards Kagome. She seems to forget his upbringing alot of the time and he tends to suffer for it because she feels embarrassed or he doesn't do something she feels is proper. Snorts. I could smack her upside the head!! And with him going to sit on the floor... again, a sign of the way he had to grow up and survive. I would honestly like to see her have to go through a week or so of his life as he grew up. Maybe then she wouldn't be so harsh in her judgement. Perhaps Kagome instead putting her energies into bashing Inuyasha's upbringing she could gently, firmly coach him in the proper ways. Argh!! I really do get chaffy at the darn Ce'Nedra. Asking about intimate times with ones beloved is very rude. And she just flat out told Kagome if Garion wasn't her husband she would take Inuyasha away from Kagome. Groans... Yep, You kept them true to character. Kagome really doesn't stand up for Inuyasha when she should. Smacks head... I guess that makes two Pet peeves I have with Kagome. How is Kagome going to fence this question? Argh!! Okay! Nikkie so wants to strangle both of them now!! (I love your writing!! And your Story!! So very much!!) Laughing at Inuyasha was not funny. He might not take it in the same way. Kagome has discovered they have baths! Giggles!! Poor Inuyasha, I wish for once he would get a break!! Perhaps Sesshoumaru could offer up some lessons for Inuyasha seeing as how everyone is laughing at his expense. And know we will hop onto Chapter 25!! Squeals!! Yay!! I'm onto to Chapter 25!! Chapter 25 : Good I'm glad that someone is letting Inuyasha know about Kagome and Ce'Nedra's enjoyment over his social inaptitude! Growls!! Perhaps Inuyasha can make her see that it is cruel what she is doing to him. Look at this!! You have me growling and grumping!! Sweet!! I am so totally drawn into the story and involved with the characters it's beyond Awesome!! Picks up picket sign... and marches around chanting... "Be nicer to Inu!!" I can't wait to read more!! Miroku is cruel but he is being honest... for once. What did Sango do that for? Smacking Miroku. Then again do I want to know why... Oh great, Now Garion is picking on poor Inuyasha!! I think this may not be one of my more favourable views of the characters right now. But then don't people have their less than perfect moments? Kudos for you!! And Bravo! Thank you Sesshoumaru!! He never lies and gave Inuyasha a hint, he did it truthfully! I wonder if anyone will help that stubborn Hanyou learn? Poor Inuyasha they are all ganging up on him. He is going to feel cornered and lash out. Beards itch? Too funny!! And don't let Barak overhear him. Poor Inuyasha. I love this story! Party is coming up!
 Reviewed By: Inu Hanyou Nikkie nsi  On: November 11, 2006 11:01 PST
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
And here we have coming up part two! Hooray!! I'm on a roll!! Continuing with Chapter 24: A Ball?! And a Banquet!! Inuyasha will like the Banquet. That boy can pack away the food. I wonder if anyone will offer up theories to his bottomless stomach? Maybe his metabolism? 300 to 400 people!?? Poor Inu... he is not going to be a happy camper at all. And I foresee some trouble in his future, involving one ticked off Hanyou and Miko. Rubs hands together giggling madly! I loved Garion's comment... "...talk with me about boring things just so they can say they did..." Isn't that rather true about hyotie-tyotie (have no idea how that is spelt...) and upperclass gatherings. Inuyasha does have the right to be concerned. His ears will stand out. I wonder how they will pull this off? What will Polgara pull out of her hat? Yay!! I love this!! Cringes... 400 pairs of hands on his sensitive ears... I wouldn't want that either. The flow of the story is simply amazing and exquisite! I truly love how you have the god granted gift of weaving the reader into the story!! So Awe-Inspiring!! Poor Inuyasha when he was offered to look human he deftly shot that option down in flames and smoke! (Heh... Perhaps Kikyou should hear that!) Oh, Nikkie squirms in her seat... what will happen and will there be a Banquet!!?? Oh dear Garion is really treading on thin and dangerous ice here with the "wolves" question. I hope he survives it. Not eating humans?!! Well perhaps Garion should met Kouga then! Kouga has no qualms about eating humans. Puts finger to chin... You know He never made any promise or indication of not eating humans after Kagome. He has been too busy running all over the place making everyone suffer while chasing after him. Some "pack leader" he is. Argh... can you tell I really have a large disfavouring of Kouga? I do enjoy the honesty that Inuyasha is showing about the wolves and Kouga that he knows. Sighs... Now if only Kagome would take her Rose coloured glasses and blinders off to see it as well. Awesome!! Inuyasha is true to character! He does at times have trouble with names. And Silk and Miroku are becoming too much of "good" friends. I pity everyone. They are all going to suffer from these two's selfishness and greedy ways. Mostly Inuyasha and Sango. I understand Inuyasha's amusement. Sango wouldn't be intimate with Miroku unless she was absolutely convinced beyond a shadow of a doubt that Miroku will be a one woman man. It must be refreshing for Inuyasha to have someone who honestly doesn't give a damn what he and Kagome are doing. Too bad the others can't seem to learn this valuable lesson about respecting others. I loved the explanation about Sendars. I smacked my hand to my head when Inuyasha made the comment to Garion's comment about Sesshoumaru. Inuyasha was fairly dense there for a moment!! Then I melted... Sesshoumaru had taken little Rin onto his horse. I had big Aw!! Moment! Darn how I love the way you write!! Totally awesome and so full of emotions and sweet moments! I loved when the discussion went into the Thunderstorm. Too adorable!! Again I wanted to say how much you kept all the characters, every one of them, in such perfect precision!! Had to giggle at the way Inuyasha reacted to Garion saying Garath was his Grandfather and super loved the way Inuyasha showed again his intelligence at putting things together. Awesome description of the view of the city!! I can see this coming out from Eddings book!! Kudos!! Woot!! Whoot!! Bravo!! Oh no... he just had to say "It's not much, but it's home..." that was a groaner! Oh Poor Inu noses!! They must be getting nauseous! I did laugh at Garion going "...it'll get boring..." Poor, POOR sensitive Inu ears!! I would be sporting a serious headache myself after all that!! I adore that Emperor!! He so does hate being an Emperor! Well he likes it but he hates the paperwork and drudgery that goes with it. I have a suspicion he is jealous of others adventures and travels.
 Title: Ch. 64
Reviewed By: MetsukiKaraTen [MediaMiner Member]  On: November 11, 2006 09:45 PST
Comment/Review:
Woot!! An update! Whew, the tension... Glad Kagome got Inu to grab onto Tetsusaiga, whew! *wipes brow* And Miroku's observation and comparison of Sess's expression with Rin, to Inu's expression with Kagome. *Ah amore* Inu's guilt and embarrassement at having injured Miroku was well done, though a little surprising. Our hanyou didn't hide behind his surliness this time. About laughed myself out my seat with Sango's hurt, angry, tearful claim that she's *not* a helpless weak female... that just struck me as being so very... Sango. Right ON!! Miroku really likes to play with fire, just making up then groping her right away... uso!! Keep up the great work!!
 Reviewed By: Bookreader9999 [MediaMiner Member]  On: November 11, 2006 01:24 PST
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Yay!! I'm glad you've found time to continue the story!! I've been going thru withdrawals waiting for the next chapter!!!
 Reviewed By: adea neri  On: November 10, 2006 23:08 PST
Comment/Review:
AN UPDATE YAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!! IM SO HAPPY, CANT WAIT TRO START READING
 Reviewed By: Inu Hanyou Nikkie NSI  On: November 10, 2006 19:41 PST
Rating(s):
Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10
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Oh my, I have been away for quite a bit!! Eepp!! Sorry!! I am back though and raring for another section of chapters to review!! Hopefully I can catch up to the rest!! Yay!! I can't wait to read more! So I am starting with Chapter 24 and trying for another three chapters!! Woott!! Wwwwwoooooottttt!!!!!! Hooray!! Another chapter and another review!! Chapter 24: Oh my word!! I think Inuyasha is going in for an epiphany here as well!! Totally awesome!! Yes!! He can see the parallels that is going on!! Thank you for making Inuyasha smart and Intelligent!! I am humbled whenever I see someone has incorporate this aspect of Inuyasha into their stories!! I love that Kagome is taking care of Rin so smoothly and naturally! As if Sesshoumaru has never threatened or tried to kill Inuyasha and herself. Awesome! I can see more of the subtle undertones of the bonding between them (the four of them) growing at a realistic and beautiful pace! Kudos!! Woot!! I do enjoy how you had Inuyasha go through his night of 'weakness' and have one of the people that he wouldn't expect to let him live after discovering the weakness help protect him, like he without thought helped protect his brother when he needed it! This I find is so close to how Rumiko has the characters interact!! I loved the way Inuyasha described how he felt without his senses. I love the freshness of this approach. Usually I am familiar with the sense of him being weak. But when you wrote he felt naked that just seemed to be more of an impact for me as I read it!! Wow! Chuckles ... Inuyasha just realized he confessed things to Sesshoumaru and was emotional in front of his brother. I can just see the inward cringing Inuyasha must be doing right now. But thankfully Sesshoumaru threw him for a good loop with the different behaviour. I am soo loving this story!! Inuyasha is coming more and more to realize there is a lot more to his brother than being a cold unfeeling and snotty uptight bastard. I love these little revelations that is sprinkled throughout the story! Just like an exquisite treat or meal!! Totally awesome and so very exciting!! I can tell you right now I love how this tale is keeping me on the edge of my seat!! Yes!! Thank you!! Inuyasha is cringing inwardly and puzzled by his brother protecting him!! Claps hands gleefully!! I love that Inuyasha and Sesshoumaru are not figuring each other out in a snap. So very realistic the way you are taking this story! Crosses fingers.. I hope we don't have to find out the results of that battle should Sesshoumaru fight Garion. Shudders. Inuyasha is on a horse again!! Lol!! I will never find this old!! I love the thought that Inuyasha would be complaining and pouting and sulking over traveling by horse. Oh my what is Garion up to? I can't wait! Inuyasha doesn't like to be disturbed when he is having "Deep Thoughts"... giggles... Poor Inuyasha, so much of his upbringing and interaction with humans from the Sengoku Jidai has obscured his views. He can't tell when someone is concerned for him and just want to know he is okay or if he wanted any help. Oh dear! I have to admit I have forgotten Polgara's advice she gave Inuyasha... must scamper back to re-read... If I could remember where it was... sighs... I did have to laugh when Garion just popped off the comment that Inuyasha and Sesshoumaru don't talk much.. Obviously they haven't seen Inuyasha and Kagome having a disagreement and Inuyasha and Sesshoumaru having a disagreement. Chuckles happily! Have I mentioned it how much I love that you have them all perfectly in character?! It's Brilliant! And Exciting! I think Inuyasha should rephrase those hates of his... I do believe Curry will have Inuyasha running away in the opposite direction and Naraku will have him charging headlong into battle and then Koga will have him blowing a gasket! Chuckles and then laughs!! I enjoyed the bonding Garion and Inuyasha shared with the comment Why Me?... It was priceless!!
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