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Title: oh that was great
Reviewed By: twistedhilarity On: November 30, 2007 23:48 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was a great chapter. A few grammar errors (commas and such), mostly in the beginning, but otherwise I enjoyed it. Truly. You had to introduce a bunch of new characters, but the name choices, and the 'drama' of how they were introduced, made it so I have them firmly embedded in my head. None of that - wait, which one was this again? It was very nicely done. I thought the pace was great, the introduction of the politics and family creed was nicely done and interesting. And the only really bad thing was watching the damn blue bar on the right go lower and lower and realizing i was getting closer and closer to the end of the chapter. I am looking forward to the next chapter even more than I was to this one. Oh, and nice Jaken moment, proving to Atrius that yes, Sesshoumaru really is a hoser bastard. I can just hardly wait to see Inuyasha being introduced to everyone else, now. The drama and humor possibilities are so huge, the mind reels. And very glad to hear your dad is doing better now! Thank goodness.
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Reviewed By: C-LOKE On: November 21, 2007 12:53 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG!! I love this story. I hope you continue soon. Please continue! I so waiting to see what happens next.
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Reviewed By: wbk [MediaMiner Member] On: November 08, 2007 03:51 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love your story!! i love how you have developed your characters. they are so in-character, but not. you have given us new explanations for their outward actions that are truely enlightening. i love being able to look at it through your eyes. after underscoring all the pain inuyasha feels in relationship to sesshoumaru, you will really have to work to make him finally accept his brother on a personal, honest level. i can't wait to see how you work it out. you have done a wonderful job of making us feel the emotions that you wanted us to feel, while still keeping the overall feel light. being able to write a story such as this, while going through hardships in your own life can't be easy. but it can be rewarding and even cathartic when you realize you have found just the right words to express your ideas. don't rush it, let your heart continue to guide you. your story hase given me so much enjoyment so far, and for that i would like to thank you.
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Title: knocking some since into u.
Reviewed By: ladytokyo [MediaMiner Member] On: October 27, 2007 10:36 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
What do you mean you didn't do anything major. of couse you did you just don't know it. the Scene where you have Inuyasha watching Sesshomaru and noticing things that he hasn't be for. that's a step ahead and he notice that sesshy in pain and is somewhat worried about him. that's something beside I like things played out if due time It just makes me want to keep on reading even more so. I'am so not a big Koga fan I wished that Inuyasha had kick his ass again a left him hurtin. you think that baka would have learn but we now know that he hasn't. and a mircle had just happen by spearing his life cause our inu boy wouldn't have done so. And I don't know after this chapter I wouldn't want the poor pervert to be with him. baka wolf think's he can just take well that Kagome that's what I say. (picture this if you will.. Inu and wimply wolf fighting why don't you take Kagome I don't want her why don't you take her! I don't want the bitch either. keh lololol) ok sorry but that was funny in my head. I would like to see Inuyasha mature side again you know when Inuyasha and Sesshomaru finally have that talk. (when you get older you realize how you want a family). hm so who are you going to get rid of? maybe the wolf that's no lost and well you know that I wont sherd one tear if Kagome came up missing. Um are they still fighting Narkua forgot? hehehe snuggling lemon. ok talk to you later.
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Reviewed By: gen50 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 24, 2007 19:46 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
i feel i have to explain the 8 - it was merely because - you left it too abruptly and then immediately launched into author's notes without ending. i mean after putting "i hate you" (as said by Inu), you should put something like "TBC" or CHAPTER END. i was reading and suddenly there you were. also the 8 is because nothing really happened although i loved the internal dialogue of sess and inu...- i did not get the why of the chapter. the actions of the party members were a little off - but this may be because of the different shifts of pov - that sometimes it gets hard when suddenly it shifts to a third party pov. ** on a separate note* am sorry about your RL experiences. all i can say is be careful max(i dont know what to call you so i'll say max) but if there are deeps, there will be highs like you, i'm in the deeps - but there are friends to help you and keep you fine. take care. ****
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Title: hiya
Reviewed By: ladytokyo [MediaMiner Member] On: October 22, 2007 13:54 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AWE stop pushing yourself so hard this is a great chapter. I was worried that I wouldn't get the chance to review I was doing a few others and I knew I wanted to do your but I almost forgot I was like whew going thing I remember before I sign out. any way I laughed and cried and laugh and oh annd awe the hold time reading it. stupid wolf needs to learn another lesson. keh Kagome I was suppose to be his incert puking noises here. lol they could have let Kagome rest while the males kept going. I wouldn't want some whiney chick in my home getting on my nerves trying me to commit murder. (they'll never find the body MUHAHAHAHAHAHAHHA!!!) sorry un what was I saying again? damn forgot hold on while I think. It's time for the talk and a bit more nesting maybe another lemon. keh you have a lot of dogs. Sesshomaru's Youkai is so freaking funny I don't know what to do with myself. This so funny. hn run monk run the big wimp wolf is after you. I have to say that my favorite part beside the funnies is the end where the two Inu's are talking and inuyasha has a momory fantime pain. and Sesshomaru say's "Is there no kind word in you for me Inuyasha?" Sesshomaru thought. "No there isn't….not like you deserve one." Inuyasha said. Sesshomaru looked at Inuyasha in confusion, what was he talking about? It was then he realized he had asked his question out loud. Damn it all…. Sesshomaru's mind whirled rapidly; he just didn't know what to say….are you looking forward to seeing the castle? That would probably anger Inuyasha. Is there anything you would like me to do? That would most certainly lead to rude, graphic suggestions from Inuyasha. "What are you thinking about?" Inuyasha asked, breaking Sesshomaru's concentration. "Hmm?" Sesshomaru grunted. "You look like your thinking hard about something, I was wondering what." Inuyasha said. "To be honest…..I am trying to think of what to say to you….nothing seems acceptable." Sesshomaru stated softly. "Why would…I mean since……what?" Inuyasha fumbled. awe. Is there no kind word in you for me Inuyasha?" I thought they could hear each other's thoughts. I wonder what is was like being sealed to the tree for fifty years? hm ok that's all I can think of now. dudhudhduhduhdhd!! Super INU sesshomaru flying with his brother over his shoulder. dhddh! lol ok that's all for now.
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Reviewed By: hyperactive pup On: October 21, 2007 12:32 PDT
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aww u poor thing. don't push urself too hard. Remember karma. but i hope everyhting gets better for you. thanks for updating despite your troubles. .sniff. U r so strong. Ja ne
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Reviewed By: AKB On: October 21, 2007 07:28 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You are one hell of a writer. I absolutely, positively love it! I found the fic yesterday and I couldn't stop reading it until I was finish. Your organization is superb, everything falls into place. I hope everything turns out for the better for you. Everything will be alright in the long run.
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Reviewed By: xzylne On: October 19, 2007 23:26 PDT
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It was pretty interesting, but I am wondering who Inuyasha stays with in the end. How many chapters are you planning to do? And does Kagome and Inuyasha ever have lemons or just Sesshomaru and Inuyasha. Like who's the pair in this story? So many questions....
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Reviewed By: Ethereal Siren [MediaMiner Member] On: October 19, 2007 01:56 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really loved the new chapter. Don't worry about the chapter not having major events. I think the interaction that went on was significant enough. I really enjoyed it and I laughed a lot too. I loved when Sesshoumaru picked up Inuyasha and Shippo and took off. There are actually tons of little instances that I loved in this chapter. Usually most authors and get in between 1-5 laugh-out-loud moments or moments where you just have to stop and let it run through your head again until you're composed enough to read some more..., but for you, it seems like almost every paragraph holds such moments. On the issue of the picture I hoped Kagome could have taken... I agree, the bitch doesn't deserve pictures much less the privilege of the memory. I was thinking more along the lines of how such a beautiful sight would be a sin to not try and capture in some way simply to remind all who see it that such beauty is in the world... I sincerely hope that your personal life is blessed with the good karma you must have for brightening our days with your talent in storytelling. I look forward to your next chapter, may it be posted soon, and with an author's notes containing better news.
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Title: It's My Life
Reviewed By: wolfluv [MediaMiner Member] On: October 18, 2007 11:29 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey sorry to hear about your Dad and all the messed up stuff going on I pray your Dad doesn't end up in a wheelchair I've been in one since I was 22 I'm 36 now. Physical therapy will suck but make sure he does it! I hope things will get better for you truly! As far as this last chapter is concerned to me it was perfect and it flowed with the whole story so far so don't berated yourself! I really liked the last part where Sess said home and Inu say's I hate you! Please continue you're doing so well and this has to be one of the most original plots I have yet seen! As far as not liking Kouga well there's a story on Adultfanfiction that's called Batsu it show's a softer side of Kouga that's totally believable and there's another one too Lost hopes where Inu and Kouga are together in both but hey I love Sess and Inu pairings as much as Inu and Kouga. But your doing a great keep it up please don't let this one die like so many others I have seen! Good Luck to you and know that you have a new Fan to boot!
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Reviewed By: LadySess [MediaMiner Member] On: October 18, 2007 00:57 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OHMYGOD!! i love your new chapter.......i love the way that inu-chan and sess couldn't get there minds off each other....i also loved the way sess acted after wht kouga-kun said i mean he should know by ow that he can't beat inu-chan......so sess would rip him limb from limb......i can't wait to see how thing go at the castle so PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!!!.....p.s.... so bout your dad
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Reviewed By: Twistedhilarity On: October 17, 2007 23:44 PDT
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Yeaa! So happy to see an update! Poor Sessh, so much to make up for, and I'm so curious what the fuzziness is going to involve as it changes. And...stupid stupid-ness. Ha! I was snorting over that one. I enjoyed the youkai dialogue in this one quite a bit, too, especially Inuyasha's little - but the sex was good! - discussion, LOL. So sorry to hear about your father! I hope he is improving. I know back injuries take so long to heal and the therapy is so long, so I send you best wishes for a good recovery for him!
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Reviewed By: Princess Sin [MediaMiner Member] On: October 17, 2007 22:28 PDT
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I for one did not see anything wrong with the chapter. it would have seen odd that they didn't stop to rest especially when they have kagome with them. it seems that's all they do when she is around. and is kagome an idiot or what? what makes her think inuyasha still wanted to marry her after she refused to remove those beads from his neck. not only that he made it plain that he wouldn't marry her if she was the last person on earth. plus she continues to gripe and snap at him. what in the world is on her mind. no man would take the kind of abuse she has put inuyasha through. let alone marry her. and poor koga, he's just asking for a butt whipping. it seems he is asking for an early death when you mess with sesshomaru. so is koga going to ask miroku about being his consort while at the palace. and what about Sango? it seems to me that miroku doesn't think much about her anymore. is he perhaps thinking about a dark hair wolf prince as well. again, there was nothing wrong with this chapter. it was great but i look forward to when they arrive at the castle. i take it that's when the fun begins.
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Reviewed By: PirateCaptainBo [MediaMiner Member] On: October 17, 2007 18:42 PDT
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Good thing! XD heehee I like Koga! in most fics! And I like Koga in this one! XD
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