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Reviewed By: White Raven [MediaMiner Member] On: November 30, 2005 02:11 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, this is the first and coolest fanfic I've read, and it's soooo good, I mean usually I just read Inuyasha fics(Inuyasha ROCKS and I
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Title: enoying the story
Reviewed By: chill guy On: November 28, 2005 01:06 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow it's incredible to me that you've been able to keep writing this fic. I remember first reading years ago, but I forgot about it for awhile. I'm glad I found it again though. I'm really feeling the progression of the story and I find it interesting to look at Bulma as she was in the first chapter of the story and compare to the way she is now in your latest chapter. Great fic, I'll keep an eye out for an update. ps. When did you first start writing this?
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Title: heh..
Reviewed By: Meems On: November 11, 2005 06:59 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Everybody needs alittle yaoi now and then. My friends and I've been wondering when you'd update, and now you have! Love the story, and am waiting for the next chapter, even though I'm not a patient waiter, I'll be nice today ^-^ Later, ~*~Meems (too lazy to log in, but the name's MiminyamaizaDaima
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Title: demonwitch
Reviewed By: demonwitch [MediaMiner Member] On: November 08, 2005 23:52 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
not really into yoai but as u said its important to the plot so ill live now lets try to come up with the next chapter before the end of the year thanks ;) bye
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Reviewed By: seriously freaked out On: November 08, 2005 15:02 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is getting way too twisted!!!! all the pleasuer/pain stuff, that was good, it fit. but this kill-crazy Goku? i mean, i'm all for alter egos and everything, but this is just too wacko. even for me. and poor Chichi, she didnt even have a line! on a less opinionated level. this story is very well written and quite well thougt out. there are a few inconsistancies between chapters which show that sometimes you were writing on impulse, which is good. all of the characters stay in character for the story with an added extra of split personaity on Bulma's part. the invention of Freza's half breed daughter was a stroke of genious!!! ive never read anything like that ever! i havent finished reading it yet but this is getting too weird for this time of day. if THIS is what you come up with when youre awake than i'd absolutly HATE to see your nightmares!!!
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Reviewed By: PsychoticTeddyBear On: November 08, 2005 01:47 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG!! u ppl rock at this! I cant wait until the next chapter! I did notice tho that at some points in the story, you confused Princess Zucchini with Princess Ilandra, but still very nicely done! The yaoi was so hawt btw! A+++ work, hope you update soon :)
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Reviewed By: Nioru On: November 07, 2005 21:43 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, I like your style writing, but, I just don't have enough time to write reviews. bunch of tests and crap. I hope you don't fel offended if I dont review you again. I do like your story though. I only watch Dragon Ball Z on occasion and thats like once a year. I think your a great writer, you're still continieing this aren't you? I was going to try to use up all 1500 characters but I've run out of things to say and I'm not even sure your reading this. -Nioru Misachi P.S. this is only a screen name
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Title: nada
Reviewed By: The Evil WOOHOO [MediaMiner Member] On: November 07, 2005 12:48 EST
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i have no problem with the yaoi. in fact, i see myself waiting intently until the next chapter arrives. a few grammatical errors, but hey, you're only human :) I enjoyed this chapter quite a bit. hmmm maybe vegeta will soften up (no pun intended) and become bulma's prince in shining spandex...
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Reviewed By: Gohans_Onna [MediaMiner Member] On: November 06, 2005 21:57 EST
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Lol...interesting. I'm not sure what to think about this chapter, but I do not hate you for the yaoi part! Perhaps Kakarott will soften him some and turn Vegeta into the person that Bulma wants him to be. Lol, I don't know. Good chapter, but you do need to edit it really bad! There are quite a few mistakes!
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Reviewed By: alexandrea romanzesco On: November 06, 2005 20:07 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
ooo zuchinni is being so skanky... i'm glad vegeta didn't kill her though, i actually like her, even though she's wayy mousey. and good for bardock for getting some royal booty. and goku/vegeta is awesome...mmm mmm good. and vegeta misses bulma mucho.. it's kinda cute.. in that obessesive, creepy way that vegeta makes endearing. ~alex~
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Title: very nice!!!!
Reviewed By: lafemmevegeta On: September 19, 2005 18:40 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey Goddess, it's September so I don't know if you're even considering putting your notes together and post more chapters, I sure hope you are. If you have finished this fic on another site, please email me at janellab2k@yahoo.com if possible. This is one of the best fics out there as you told us at adultfanfiction.net. Please don't let it die like this. Finish what you started for all of your fans sake. Bulma needs closure and a home. Only you have the power to make Bulma a happy person. For Bulma's sake finish the fic please.
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Reviewed By: Gohans_Onna [MediaMiner Member] On: July 27, 2005 22:22 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LOL...that was slightly fucked up. But as always, update soon!
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Reviewed By: golbatgirl1 On: July 20, 2005 00:28 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I always enjoy your story...you're not deprived, just moving the story along...you're a really great author. I have recommended your fic to several people already and they always enjoy it too. Keep writing...I can't wait to see what happens next :-) btw...spell check this chapter...I noticed that some of the words, like of and in, were missing letters...
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Reviewed By: laredith On: July 18, 2005 22:56 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh dear god...... *stares blankly*.... i dont think that was necessary.... oh well, i enjoy the story regardless and excluding that little insert.... oh dear god
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Reviewed By: Nikoru [MediaMiner Member] On: July 15, 2005 18:07 EDT
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Ah, I love it when you update! Rather creepy there at the end, she's just a nasty little girl, ne? Still a wonderful story as always!
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