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Reviewed By: alexandrea romanzesco On: August 03, 2004 20:24 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow your chapters are getting better and better and shorter but whatver i don't like to nitpick i love thwe story and can't wait till the enxt chapter! ~alex~
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Reviewed By: Melina On: August 03, 2004 18:09 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Once again you have managed to write a great chapter. I can't wait to see what happens next!
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Reviewed By: Nikoru [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2004 13:23 EDT
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Very good; I like the little twist that makes you wonder if the baby is from one of the slave traders and not Vegeta. Bulma's inner dialogues are interesting, too. Perhaps she is going insane?
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Reviewed By: sweet_onna On: August 03, 2004 10:19 EDT
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ok i want more and dont make me wait again please please i have been die'n here not have slave updated. i know i need a life but please for me update a little sooner. oh ya and that chap was a little short i thought they they where going to get longer the longer we had to wait. oh well it was an update thats all that matters.but please update more soon and im kida lost in the voice thing so explain that a little more next time bye
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Title: slave
Reviewed By: mlf On: August 03, 2004 07:05 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
it was good.i just wish that things were different for vegeta and bulma.but i know that thats how it has to be...just keep them both safe..maria
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Reviewed By: Gohans_Onna [MediaMiner Member] On: July 21, 2004 03:23 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
BWAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAAAAAAAA!!!!!! God, this is so insanely evil. I just finished this chapter and saw that your inspiration was "Starfuckers Inc" by NIN. I love NIN! I first learned of them from my bf....who would probably die for Trent Reznor. Anyhow, this story is great and evil and just more evil. Bwa! I love how you laugh evilly in your Author's Notes! It makes me laugh so hard, because it seems like we are so alike. I have never really read a story like this about Bulma and Vegeta, but I have read your stuff before and have really liked it. Lol, anyway...I'm going to have to stop at this point and start again tomorrow, for it's 3:21 in the morning and I have been reading thist story for hours. I will review again, have no worries! Thanks for being so sadistically evil!
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Reviewed By: alex (alexandrea romanzesco) On: July 18, 2004 21:07 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
the chap was short but i lvoed it, and i really really hope you feel better cuz your a kick ass person and i don't like kick ass people getting sick.... i really hope you feel better ~alex~
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Reviewed By: blessed trinity 3d On: July 17, 2004 06:31 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You know what I'd like to see happen in this story? I'd like to see B and V get back together again! Honestly - you keep saying that they're going to get back together but so far they aren't so much as thinking about one another! Hurry hurry! I like da spankyness of this fic!
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Reviewed By: Koaitan Princess [MediaMiner Member] On: July 17, 2004 02:08 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, great chapter. I'm a bit confused about your excuse though. Is it that you moved and didn't have internet for a while, or is it that you were REALLY sick? They're both good excuses, but, which one was it? I think you really just didn't feel like messing with it for awhile. I understand how that goes though. When you've been constantly writing a story, you just get kind of tired of it, and if you don't take a break from it, you're writing becomes...well, dull in a sence. I myself have been taking a break from mine. I want to do some major revisions, but that's a major pain in the ass, and I think I'm just going to post it how it is. Anyways, that was alot of needless blabbing. Oh Well. Anyways, good chapter, update soon, and Ja'ne.
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Reviewed By: lEAH [MediaMiner Member] On: July 16, 2004 03:01 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
gONZO WOULD BE A GOOD CHARACTER TO ADD TO THIS STORY.
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Reviewed By: Melina On: July 16, 2004 00:20 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great chapter! What's happening to Bulma? Well I hope you're feeling better, take care of yourself, okay.
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Reviewed By: Nikoru [MediaMiner Member] On: July 15, 2004 18:40 EDT
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^_^ I'm curious as to who the voice in Bulma's head is, hmmm...Poor thing, going through so much. Ilandra seems to realy love her though, which is sweet. Can't wait to hear more about Veggie though ^_~ I hope you feel better soon!
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Title: slave
Reviewed By: maccam [MediaMiner Member] On: July 15, 2004 16:45 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i like this story i just don't like the girl thing.(and that's my opinion)..anyway i sorry to hear that you are going though what your going though.i hope you feel better.my husband has the samr problem so i can relate how you feel...anyway i want more of vegeta soon..i miss him...please update soon...maria
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Reviewed By: Kendraless [MediaMiner Member] On: July 03, 2004 19:21 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
It was good up untill your depression
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Reviewed By: The Vampire Ailani On: June 22, 2004 01:21 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This fanfic is most definetly one of the best I have ever read. Though I admire fanfiction greatly, you should seriously consider writing your own original fiction so that more people can enjoy your writing. I'm glad Bulma and Vegeta will reunite soon, I miss the material from the earlier chapters so much... Too bad Bulma seems to be in love with Ilandra now.
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