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Reviewed By: Autopsy Girl On: October 13, 2004 03:30 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm back, my dear! I liked the last chapter...semi-snuff wrongness, but hey. It was juicy and thats all that counts in the realm of Slave. I'd like to see an update anytime soon - still thinking of co-writing with me, BTW? Sorry I dropped off the radar... theY
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Title: omg
Reviewed By: carla121 On: October 12, 2004 18:43 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I DON'T LOKE THIS CHAPTER!!! How could you make Goku -sweet, simple, placid Goku- into a monster! Oh, this unfairness of it all!! Well, I suppose I should see what happens to Bardock and/or Goku. *Sigh....*
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Reviewed By: Carla121 On: October 12, 2004 18:33 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this fic! It's wonderful, and I think it's truly one-of-a-kind. I just think (and maybe I'm wrong, I just offering a suggestion) that maybe it's a bit too long. It kinda drags on for like 8 chapters. In the beginning I was hooked, I fell in love with this story, and I enjoyed it immensely until about chapter 21, and it started getting monotonous and slower. Maybe if you sped things up a bit, it would improve this fic twicefold. Otherwise, I think it's a great story, I've never read anything like it. You write so maturely, it's unbelievable! I've noticed that some FanFic writers are kind of childish, but I love your writing, it's very established. You're doing a wonderful job. Keep writing!
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Reviewed By: Carla121 On: October 12, 2004 18:33 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this fic! It's wonderful, and I think it's truly one-of-a-kind. I just think (and maybe I'm wrong, I just offering a suggestion) that maybe it's a bit too long. It kinda drags on for like 8 chapters. In the beginning I was hooked, I fell in love with this story, and I enjoyed it immensely until about chapter 21, and it started getting monotonous and slower. Maybe if you sped things up a bit, it would improve this fic twicefold. Otherwise, I think it's a great story, I've never read anything like it. You write so maturely, it's unbelievable! I've noticed that some FanFic writers are kind of childish, but I love your writing, it's very established. You're doing a wonderful job. Keep writing!
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Title: still waitin...
Reviewed By: pinkpad On: October 12, 2004 08:59 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm still waiting on that update, ms goddess? Do I have to stalk you? huh? HUH? Cause I will if you want...
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Title: @__@
Reviewed By: cecelia On: October 11, 2004 19:27 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Waaaaii! When I started this a few days ago, I just assumed that it was finished. Now I feel like a total dork. XD Please continue to update! ^___^ Your style of writing is just amazing! I've been putting off my homework for days just to keep reading this. ~*^^*~ Keep up the great work!
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Title: B/V Fan
Reviewed By: Carla121 On: October 11, 2004 18:49 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved this chapter, but I still think some of the other lemons were better. Don't get me wrong, I love the fic! I hope you continue it for a long time! PS I love it when Vegeta's in a sadistic mood ;)
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Reviewed By: pinkpad On: October 11, 2004 09:12 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please update - more sex too!
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Title: chp37
Reviewed By: KanSol On: October 11, 2004 00:32 EDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
So many typos, but other than that I'm liking chapters a whole lot. I love how the plot just twist and turns, its really quite marvelous. Now for the reason I'm reviewing-I'm going to take a guess and say Frieza's child isn't going to make it. I think that's the death in the next chapter. Can't wait to find out, and please, please, please update.
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Reviewed By: Nikoru [MediaMiner Member] On: October 07, 2004 21:50 EDT
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Yeah!! I'm so happy you put some kinky B/V action in there, although everything you've been writing is great. I just can't get enough of that sadistic sexy Saiyan. ^_~ Can't wait for more!
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Reviewed By: touche' On: October 06, 2004 21:47 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Waitin' for an update... *sings*
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Reviewed By: vegetas girl On: October 05, 2004 19:13 EDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey, this is a great story please try and get the chapters out faster if you can and longer to if ya dont mind, thanks
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Reviewed By: Kaibun [MediaMiner Member] On: October 05, 2004 02:59 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well. Where to start. Ok right back to the first thoughts I had about this fic. Initially i thought it was pretty wasted. i didn't really enjoy it that much but it's the second most read story on this website so i decided i'd keep going and try and see if it worked out. it did. the story's great, you don't leave anything to the imagination lol. i think this is a great story, you've certainly taken a whole new line on the 'bulma is captured and taken to vegetasai as a slave' idea and i think its worked out perfectly. i didn't really like the whipping scene, i thought that went a bit far but the other things have been good. i really cannot see how you are planning on getting bulma and vegeta together but ok. i trust you will (you better). And the story is really descriptive too, gore to a level i've not seen in fanfics before but its still really good. i hope you update soon, its brilliant. and i was reading your author's notes and there was one a few chapters back about you feeling depressive. just letting you know i'm here if you need some advice or someone to talk to (especially if its threatening the chance of the fic getting finished). So i'm here for you, anything you need to talk about. please hurry up and update this fic totally rocks!
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Title: slave
Reviewed By: mlf On: October 03, 2004 17:51 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey it's your story.you write what you want...it is dark and sick but so is this story...i guess thats why the reast of us sick people read it.lol...maria
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Title: O.O
Reviewed By: Bethie On: October 03, 2004 17:04 EDT
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Wth was that lol lol that was a really good chappy it was just some real crazy shit lol but damn..... i hope Frezza's embreo dies i hate Frezza with a deep and dwelling passion ¬.¬ and for it to live o my would i be pissed only trunks should be allowed damnit lol (whispers to self) frezza that stupid whoreish cunt....grrr grrr and more grrr. but ya update soon please i cant wait to i know what happends next ^_^ Bethie(lunar_storm)
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