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| "Vengeance" Reviews/Comments [ 371 ] | | Pages (25): [ « ‹ 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 18 19 20 21 22 23 24 25 › » ] | Reviewed By: Xaverri On: August 24, 2009 15:08 PDT
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Such suspense!!! I love the twists you make, it shows you really have the whole story laid down in front of you as everything just follows up smoothly! I just knew Bulma was going to expect poor Puar to be the traitor, I hope it turns out for the better and I really have no idea how you're gonna do that but I can't wait for the next chapter to happen! So many things are going to happen, chi-chi and gohan, puar and radditz and of course our favorite couple of all times :) Hope to see the next chapter soon but don't rush it, quality outweighs quantity :) -X-
| Title: Chapter 10
Reviewed By: not a member On: August 24, 2009 14:43 PDT
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AHH! Okay, first off, pity that Bulma thinks Puar is up to no good... unless of course, Puar is, but I think that Tien is a good suspect for being the sneak... (Ginyu). Also, interested to see where the whole storyline is going with Guru and Dende and what they can come up with. Finally -- RED STATION?! Oh jeez, this is going to get even better. I am so excited to see where you take this next, things are going to get messy (maybe in the good way for Bulma and Vegeta? ;D). Also, I think you wrote the scene with Bulma and Chi Chi very well, I was laughing out loud during that sequence. The entire situation was hilarious. Keep up the great work, can't wait for the next chapter! Thanks!
| Reviewed By: AngelsRebellion [MediaMiner Member] On: August 24, 2009 12:52 PDT
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Oooh Red Station. This should be interesting.
| Reviewed By: nutnatz [MediaMiner Member] On: August 24, 2009 10:53 PDT
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Dun Dun Dun. Vegeta is headed right into the belly of the beast now. And poor Puar, all his indiscretions being revealed like that. I did suspect that 16 would not have been anatomically correct as he is a full android and not a full cyborg/artificial human like 17 and 18. I am also curious about Zarbon. Cannot wait to see what happens next!
| Reviewed By: nutnatz [MediaMiner Member] On: August 18, 2009 14:53 PDT
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"I absolutely looove what you've done with the place so far" Just joking. Really though it's good to see you writing new stuff again and honestly, I'm loving the Puar/Radditz. I am getting sort of excited to see where you are going to go with the ChiChi/16 story. Especially now we've confirmed that Goku is still alive. By the way, I am so happy that you found a plausible reason for Chi Chi to start training again. Hope that the delay between updates is not too long.
| Title: So Good!!
Reviewed By: yunglucyboo On: August 14, 2009 23:18 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow this story keeps getting better. i love how you make the characters act as they do in the anime, but at the time i can see your talent shine. What makes this story interesting has got be the dialogue, its just perfect, and funny as hell. Especially the scene where puar realizes that raddiz will eat him when learns hes been sleeping with a blue cat!! lol other than that, quick up the awesome job! i cant wait for the next chappie
| Reviewed By: starbrella On: August 13, 2009 18:33 PDT
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I wish i would have read this sooner! It's amazing as expected from your work. I can't wait to see where the story is going next. How Goku and Pic are going to survive. What Bulma and Vegeta are going to plan and how Chichi and Sixteen's relationship is going to go :)!!!! Ur full of surprises and i love this fic! please keep writing!
| Title: chapter 9
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy [MediaMiner Member] On: August 07, 2009 15:02 PDT
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oh my gosh, oh my gosh, this gets better and better, and i think I know who the mole is, and if it is how I think it is my gosh, I never saw that coming, I love the way you are interconnecting everything, and showing how all the characters over lap, I also like the way you drop clues, or atleast what I take to be clues, like for instance, your reference to the female changing room that Chi Chi uses, and how Gero might have used it for a female. And oh my gosh, you completely threw me with that 16 and chi chi thing, wow, I was like Chi chi Nooooo! and um, is 16 built like other guys? how could you leave it at that Cliff hanger. And boy was I happy when you revealed Goku, oh gosh, and the way you showed his personality, I love it, his thought processes as he thinks out loud to Piccollo, I really loved his dialogue. also, I am beginning to like your Puar and Raaditz interactions, I laughed when you showed Puar looking at himself in his original form and thinkin that Raaditz will eat him when he finds out. The humour you inject into the story is handled really well especially the way it is balanced with the more sadder moments in the story. I can't wait for your next update, but I will try my best to be patient.
| Title: chapter 8
Reviewed By: VenusLegacy [MediaMiner Member] On: August 07, 2009 13:37 PDT
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16 is so cute, you just wanna hug him, especially when he gets protective over Chi Chi ""You will leave her be." Another thing I admire about your story is the way you have the dialogue match the personalities of the characters. And you gotta love 16's reaction to the magazine, lol "Those women have no clothes on." And this bit made me laugh "They appeared to be hugging each other, and Sixteen wondered aloud why the two other men would care about the friendship of two naked women." I'm also captivated by the political intrigue, and the tit for tat between the rebels and Frieza, I like that you have written in a potential mole, I'm wracking my brains trying to think who it could be, as if there mission wasn't dangerous enough, this adds another level to it. Bulma has told everyone about her operation, so it's hard to narrow it down, at the moment I am suspicious about Gero, I am suspicious of Tien too, but Tien seems like he lacks the motivation to do anything, he is so unrecognisable from the person he was before I wondered what happened to him exactly, he's like a shell of himself. The final scene blew me away, the showdown with Gohan Vegeta and Bulma, and then the final part with Vegeta and Gohan, I loved that last part with Vegeta, you can feel the tragedy and strength of his character. This is definitely one of my favourite chapters of the story.
| Reviewed By: not a member On: August 07, 2009 12:03 PDT
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Oh this one was positively fantastic! Just overflowing with plot details! I'm really glad to know that Piccolo and Goku are alive, albeit, not well, but I'm really wondering what's going to happen between Chi Chi and 16. Also, really glad to see the attraction between Vegeta and Bulma, that's always hopeful. Interesting to see who would be leaking information to others, I am curious as to who Bulma tells everything to exactly. Kills me that you say there are going to be delays, I absolutely cannot get enough of this story especially now because Vegeta has a face to go with Blue and knows exactly who she is. Keep up the good work, and thanks for the amazing chapter!
| Reviewed By: Vegeta's Blue-Haired Angel [MediaMiner Member] On: August 06, 2009 23:00 PDT
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You're killing me!!! Need more chapters, soon! =D
| Reviewed By: vicky_aka_bulma@yahoo.com On: August 06, 2009 17:23 PDT
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XD I so love you for writing you know. sooooo much!!!
| Title: Woo hoo~~!!
Reviewed By: Saiya-jin44 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2009 15:10 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm so sorry this took me a few days to review, but I wanted to make sure I read this when I had a chance to sit down and really take it all in. :) Anyway, as usual this is fantastic. I know we were chatting about this before, but I really do think you handle more serious subject matter with grace. In fact, at the end of this chapter when Vegeta, in perfect form by the way, was scolding Gohan I really couldn't help but feel the sincerity in his warning. But, also as usual you do manage to make the reader feel a bit of relief with the comedy. This is something I always have trouble with so, honestly, this is a gift! PLEASE continue and even though you say this chapter was hard to write it was certainly not difficult to read. It always feels that way to an author I think!! ;) Also, I'm very excited to see exactly how and why Vegeta and Bulma come to know each other's identity!!!
| Reviewed By: thewarofgenesisthree On: August 03, 2009 04:06 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is fantastic! I love this, and check my email often for updates, even though I don't even use that email address anymore! I think this is one of your best work yet, and I really do think you're improving as the years go by! Keep up the good work, and update soon please! ^^
| Title: Bravo!!
Reviewed By: tinalynn On: August 02, 2009 00:27 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow this chapter kept me on the edge on my computer chair. now im wondering if vegeta/vengeance is gonna figure out that blue is really bulma the one he thought of as a bimbo at the meeting!! other than that, your doing a fabulous job!keep up the super work
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